Developing Better Relationships - Page 2 - Writers Forum

Glen1 · 01-23-2007, 02:50 PM

Thanks everybody for your comments and opinions. I appreciated them very much. I'll try to write something next time a long the lines of a Christian Ethic. Maybe this was a little bit off the wall.

But anyway thanks.

Glen

Flexbile Garphite · 01-24-2007, 03:56 PM

Wow. Glen1 sure took that in stride.

Glen1 · 02-03-2007, 02:46 PM

Everyone: I'm discarding this item and putting it in a different context. The new essay's beginning is an introduction which will help and will be better than the last one. I also have taken out all of the biblical stuff. I will post it in forum this afternoon. I hope that you all will enjoy it. The title is "Relationships and Their Meaning - An Introduction."

quignov · 02-03-2007, 07:48 PM

quignov · 02-03-2007, 07:48 PM

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Originally Posted by Winged Sandals

Uugh, you guys this piece of writing isn't here to be criticized because of its topic. It's here to be criticized on its writing!

well. You are right. However, the essay has absolutely nothing to do with the title. The proposed topic idea is in no way related to the essay itself. Also, this should be more correctly labeled an opinion piece as there is no desire to see any viewpoint except his/her own, and there is absolutely no use of logic in the piece.

Cheers, Quignov

okay, deeply sorry I didn't see the second page when I responded... my apologies

nostalgicdemise · 02-07-2007, 10:13 AM

The best way to improve this essay, in my opinion, would be to fully flush out the things that really make relationships interesting.
People don't just meet, start to like each other, and then BAM! Get married. There's also a lot of bickering and arguing and reconciling and compromising, and "Fine, okay. Chinese tonight. But, by God, we're having Italian tomorrow."
And not everyone abandons their friends once they become involved with an intimate someone else. Plenty of couples keep close connections with their own friends, and most will connect with the friends of their partner, as well.
Granted, there are some who cut ties completely, but it's harmful.

If you want to include the church related stuff, I suppose you can do that, too. But not even all Catholics follow the rigid guidelines that are in your essay.

Just remember that no two relationships are the same, and no relationship goes without a hitch or two. Or twenty.

Oh, and I'm semi-Christian. And Jesus was one cool cat.

(Just figured I'd impose my beliefs like everyone else.)

KStayte · 02-10-2007, 05:50 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Glen1

Everyone: I'm discarding this item and putting it in a different context. The new essay's beginning is an introduction which will help and will be better than the last one. I also have taken out all of the biblical stuff. I will post it in forum this afternoon. I hope that you all will enjoy it. The title is "Relationships and Their Meaning - An Introduction."

Glen one thing that is drilled in my head constantly is not to ever throw anyway material I have written. Perhaps what I write now, may not be the piece I want to print, but it may provide a starting point for an in depth later on. I would encourage you to keep writing, congratulate you on your courage for putting this out there for critique, and admire your attitude and determination. I believe you will do well. We all are practicing this craft, and each of us take each step, one at a time, in our own journey.

boongee · 02-11-2007, 12:23 AM

When I read this, I just felt like it was something a CCD teacher gives to a 6 year old child. To me, there was no point in reading it. It wasn't exactly interesting, creative or well-written, either.

gradefpoultry · 02-25-2007, 04:26 PM

Hehehehe...you have a playboy avatar.

...I just find that funny.

edit: and I just realized I bumped a thread that was over 10 days old...sorry!

Subterranean1984 · 02-27-2007, 07:15 PM

Are you serious? Is this real. Poor writing, didactic, biased. A dissertation on dated, judgmental values. Relationships don't constitute only Christian human beings, or christian values. Not everyone wants to/needs to get married, etc etc. Your whole frame of reference for this piece is a Jew Dao Christian soaked conformist nightmare. In fact this approach to marriage hasn't been working for generations, taken a look at the divorce rate? Quite a misleading title. Oh, one more thing. I know religious folks can't help but being hypocrites, but showing it in your avatar? If you’re so enamored with Christian values, how can you represent yourself with the Playboy Bunny? A "heathen, heretical organization." Hmmm? Gays offend you but not boobies shown for cash? Hmmmm? (Yes, boobies).
Didn't realize there was a second page. Whups.

Subterranean1984 · 02-27-2007, 07:20 PM

God I'm a dick