I liked your article.
We share some of the same tastes in music, too, by chance. I think your article was good writing. It just needs soome editing. Here's a few little things I happen to notice. I'm sure you can easily spot some of the others, after you've distanced yourself from the writing of it, a bit.
Glad to hear you found a way to get yourself into that writing groove again.
Keep it up!!!
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Maybe that’s not the only reason I left though, there were a few others.
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I might revise this line a bit.
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Perhaps, though, the true reason I quite writing for Epinions is that I grew far too objective to review the things I wanted to review, such as cars, musical instruments, and movies.
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I would watch out for words you repeat often, like the word "though." And, I'm glad to see you made a typo I frequently make, the word "quit" doesn't have an "e" on the end
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It is true that my reviews most likely would have gotten much better, it is more true that I would lost interest if I weren’t over-generalizing and getting the feathers of more accomplished writers fluffed.
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Personally, I think the sentance would read better if it were split into two. Also, "that I would lost interest" probably needs the word "have" in there to help it make sense
That's just a few thoughts. Keep up the good work. Writers block is no good at all!
