Thread: High and Dry

moved

Some good lines, but which will you keep, which will you change? When you have it edited, then I will know your intentions.

One suggestion. Of the four paragraphs, the first three start with 'I'. It's true that personal essays are supposed to be personal, but this constant contemplation of the lint in your belly button does little to attract my interest.

Do your editing and bring it back.

Ok, updated. Not finished yet. will soon.

Better spacing can make a big difference