Thread: The Ties of the Generation's

Hey everybody, I know I haven't been on in a long time but i'm back, and I wrote this essay/news article for my journalism class. Constuctive ctitisim and Critique are appreciated

Music has unknowingly become a staple of the modern age. In today’s generation it is nearly impossible to find somebody that doesn’t listen to any type of music. With radio, television, movies, Ipods, and internet, music is constantly around us. With allof these things surrounding us on a day to day basis it seems music is quite difficult for us to avoid. But who would want to avoid this life essential? Nobody that I know

It seems that every school day (if not everyday) starts and ends the same for teenagers. Wake up, ride to school whether it be through a school bus or car, first period through fifth period with a lunch somewhere in between, ride home, homework (or not), and finally sleep. O f coarse this may change, however; there is one thing that connects all of these day to day activities, and that would be music. Wake up to a radio playing your favorite station. Get on the bus or in your car and listen to an mp3 player or turn on the radio. First period through fifth period listen to music when possible. Ride (or drive) home, listening to music. Do homework (or not) with some background music. Finally Sleep, usually falling to sleep listening to what other than; music.

Music is what ties the generation together. Whether you listen to country or rap, metal or classical, music is music, and it is always a good way to start a conversation with someone you know nothing about. Asking “what kind of music do you like?” m seems to be the number one question of today’s generation. So next time you want to start a conversation just say, “Hey, what kind of music are you in too?”.

The second paragraph needs a lot of work. I would say get rid of it altogether.

You need a better argument then assumption; there are way too many assumptions as it is. Firstly you assume that since you don't know anyone who deliberately avoids music, this kind of person doesn't exist. Secondly, you assume a role for teenagers and that what connects their days and binds their spirits is music. Are there any concrete examples you want to provide? Any comments from interviewees? Any outside research? Other than you, who falls asleep listening to music? You assume this, too. Do you really believe that every person in your generation has the luxury of listening to music at every impluse, at every waking hour? That every person in your generation goes to school or has that ordinary day you so readily describe? Can everyone afford a portable music device, such as an iPod or mp3 player? Do people outside your school, your city, your state, your country, count as your generation? Think about it.