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07-07-2008, 12:10 PM
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leave Me Like This
This is a little repetitive, but I like how it turned out. Hope you guys do to.
There is a fine, Line...
And past that hope becomes despair.
It's so ea-sy to cross...
Before you know it, you are there
I crossed that line to-day
As I watched you walk away
I hear the words you say...
But nothing makes any sense.
What about the times you said you loved me?
And how I answered each and every time with a kiss?
What about the times you pulled me right back from the edge and
Why has it got tho end like this?
There was a fine, Line...
And crossing that we fell apart.
You won't come back for me...
But still you hold my heart.
I can't cross that line this way
I lay here and watch you walk away
I don't hear the words you say...
And nothing makes any sense.
But I
Remember All the times you said you loved me
And I silenced you every time with a kiss
And all thetime you pulled me back from
This edge I fallen off, and
Why have you got to leave me like this?
How can you go and leave me like this...?
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07-07-2008, 07:50 PM
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I think that's sad.
It moves me, which is what it is supposed to do.
I have a problem with his line though.
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And how I answered each and every time with a kiss?
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It's hard to sing it... I tried 2 or three differnt ways, so just think about it.
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07-09-2008, 04:45 PM
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yeah it's kind of hard... that's why I gotta sing it,  |
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07-11-2008, 04:54 AM
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Apart from being slightly tacky and oh so cliche, this song has merit. Largely because, as said, it moves.
The only line that doesn't flow for me is the one that ends with 'any sense'...the any is unneccessary I feel.
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07-11-2008, 02:49 PM
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it probably could stand some revision, but I really have hardly looked at it since writing it. I noticed the "Lyrics" section here, remembered being pleased with this song, and decided to post it.
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