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05-16-2008, 08:56 AM
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Random Rambling
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Come down down, they'll say,
But everything looks perfect from far away.
Come down down, but we'll stay.
Last edited by Damien. : 06-19-2008 at 03:31 PM.
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05-16-2008, 10:54 AM
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Crappy compared to what, Damien?
Do they make less sense than Nirvana lyrics? Is the second one less loopy than America lyrics?
I can EASILY see somebody doing this ala "alternative" or whispered and whimpered in front of some dark neo-goth background.
Especially the second one.
You don't sing this stuff, do you? If you did I think you'd find yourself starting to move away from "pomes" and more towards musical lyrics.
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05-16-2008, 11:10 AM
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I don't think this is crappy at all. I think this would be perfect for an Industrial track.
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05-16-2008, 12:29 PM
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Come down down, they'll say,
But everything looks perfect from far away.
Come down down, but we'll stay.
Last edited by Damien. : 06-19-2008 at 03:31 PM.
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05-16-2008, 12:32 PM
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Lemme see if I can explain this any.... I was rather drunk and I noticed a magnet on the fridge that said 'drunkard' you know those magnets you can write sentance with? Yeah... and my bowtie got removed during a 'poetry reading' on a bed. What else... Marla is from Fight Club. Enough said. The last bit is trying to act sober, and the third segment is about someone. I think I tried to do a little Imogen Heap-ishness but with rhyming.
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Come down down, they'll say,
But everything looks perfect from far away.
Come down down, but we'll stay.
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05-16-2008, 02:57 PM
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I like it, it it is simple and works well.
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05-16-2008, 03:27 PM
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A suggestion: don't ever try to explain them any more.  |
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05-19-2008, 08:24 AM
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Come down down, they'll say,
But everything looks perfect from far away.
Come down down, but we'll stay.
Last edited by Damien. : 06-19-2008 at 03:31 PM.
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