xdarkeyesoldierx

A black cloud covered the sky
On the day you died
And now I can’t stop crying
No day goes that I don’t shed a tear
Every single short memory
Cuts into my mind at the worst times
And I fall to my knees and pray

(Chorus):
Are you in a better place now
I have to know, I must find out
Are you happier than you were here
Because that’s what you were seeking
This is my final greeting card

An empty seat waits today
Eyes look to the sky
Only tonight could we smile
Remembering your favorite time
But nothing is ever the same
With the one piece from the game missing
Rewinding is impossible

(Chorus):
Are you in a better place now
I have to know, I must find out
Are you happier than you were here
Because that’s what you were seeking
This is my final greeting card

If heaven is a place here
Then no one should leave
Why did you abandon us
In such quick time, with no warning signs
Shadows have replaced you for day
Running away, open arms disappear
And the gates fall open for you

(Chorus):
Are you in a better place now
I have to know, I must find out
Are you happier than you were here
Because that’s what you were seeking
This is my final greeting card

(Bridge):
Is heaven as nice as I’ve been told
Are the walkways paved with gold
Will I ever see you again
Will we ever be friends again

(Chorus):
Are you in a better place now
I have to know, I must find out
Are you happier than you were here
Because that’s what you were seeking
This is my final greeting card

Your address can not be found
So tonight I would die just to see you
But in time again I will see you
If hope prevails to dream

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"Never let the past catch up to you, if the future seems so bright, but you can't escape the present."

T.W. North

Eh...this is one of those songs with potential...and but it doesn't live up to it. The title is great, but doesn't really relate to the song much. I suggest keeping it for something a little more fitting. Hang on, I think it might be easier for me to simply point out the good lines:

Every single short memory
Cuts into my mind at the worst times ..although, perhaps take the 'short' out

This is my final greeting card

If heaven is a place here
Then no one should leave

Is heaven as nice as I’ve been told
Are the walkways paved with gold

ThePhoenix

I agree...It has a lot of potential to be a great song, you just need to play around with wording a bit...the great thing about language is theres usually 50 different words that all mean the same thing...Just keep working on it...

xdarkeyesoldierx

T.W. North: Thanks for the words about the title. I agree it doesn't fit too much in with the song, but I usually just title things as titles pop into mind. I'll think about another one and will change it when I have a new one. Also, I will work with the lines a bit, make some changes, and see where it is at that point.

ThePhoenix: Thanks. I will try to look through and find the words that don't fit in as well and by going through synonyms and such, see if I can make it flow more easily.

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"Never let the past catch up to you, if the future seems so bright, but you can't escape the present."