ShadowZero007

At the Moment im trying to learn to play bass and guitar and well write lyrics
erm I make an attempt every now and then but im never satisfied
This ones about my 7th period class funnlily enough
I say it sounds a bit to emo but my friend thinks we can make something out of it
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Centered Against My Will, I sit deadly still
The Blurs in this picture have faded
Oh, no thank you im far to jaded
Mid-day relief is here, and yet oh so far
Hidden, is the deepest scar
You Moved up and left without so much as bye
Oh No
last years model weeps rusted and broken
Its Tears are dry and still
self centered and so apathetic

(I cant seem to come up with a chorus so its just 2 verses)

It gets far to hot, in fathers melting pot
segregation from heaven and hell
Im blind to their stairways and Highways
Inner peace is far to deep
for this excavation of the heart
dear boy please dont mad
Wel all tried our best
maybe we can lie you to rest
On a chilly night, snow you ask
well it just might
Winter dreams broken in the morn
your sorrows and regrets form a smile
oh please stay there for a while
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Well only the first verse is about my 7th period ern I dont feel like going into what it all means maybe later
>_>
so yeah
thoughts, advice, anything?

Nefieslab

nice piece
not my kind of music though but still quite good. I've even had some thought as to a chorus,

It's days like these,
when i think about it all,
how far away away you are,
how blind you are to me.
But I keep looking up,
trying to place you,
in world I'll never know.

I know the guitar and can dabble in bass so I know how hard it can be some times. just keep going and you'll do fine in guitar, bass and lyrics. good luck man.

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Damian_Rucci

Pretty nice man, make sure you keep on writing lyrics so you can get better and better. Btw, I'm learning guitar too! I have an Ibanez what kind of guitar do you have?

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ShadowZero007

Double post sorry

ShadowZero007

I have an Epiphone

I wrote another peice

I wrote it through but the rest needs to be fixed

its just the second verse and outro

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beneath the leaden rain
hot tears will stain
I trust in my gun, oh i trust in my gun
They stare with their disdain, brought by alien pains
Oh cruel world, oh cruel world
I rest my head uncertain
beneath an iron curtain
Is this forever?
Life for the fangs of the wolf
dont bite the hands that feed
No not ever is this forever
Will I ever see home gain could it be never

Life Suspended, Life Suspended!
oh cruel world, I trust in my gun
Beneath this Iron Curtain
Life Suspended Life Suspended
(Music tempo slows and music becomes soft)
No not ever, Is this forever, could it be never....

Nefieslab

not a blody clue mate!
My uncle just gave me some old acoustic guitar when I was ten... I'm still trying to master it, seeing as I only bothered to star learning it when I was about twelve

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