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Old 04-07-2008, 10:50 PM   #1
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Good Morning, Mr. Johnson

I'll just sit back and pick up the phone,
You'll just leave me all alone,
Ain't got no friends to tell some jokes,
You just leave me all alone,

It's a bright day outside again,
But I can't really care,
Because I'm stuck at work again,
It doesn't seem so fair,

We'll good morning,
how has your day been,

You must have forgotten(must have forgotten),
WHO I AM AGAIN,

Chorus
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Good Morning, Mr. Johnson,
Can I get you some coffee or pull you up a chair,
Let me do your work for you,
No really, it's ok, I don't care,

Do you really think,
I would never scream and shout,
Good Morning, Mr. Johnson,
Go **** yourself,
Good Morning, Mr. Johnson(Johnson),
Go ****, yourself.

Put a gun up to my head and try,
But I know that it's just a sham and lie,
All I do is run away and hide,
I know that it's all just a lie,

Good morning, Mr. Johnson,
how has your day been,

Are you really drunk(really drunk),
Or did you just forget me AGAIN?

chorus

Did you know, I'm right here,
Hiding behind my shame and fear,
Did you know I wanted to blame you?

But I can't, It's too wrong,
Because it's been my fault all along,
Why don't I just come out with the truth?

chorus

Mr. Johnson(Mr. Johnson),
Good morning,
could you please go **** yourself?
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Old 04-08-2008, 04:34 AM   #2
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A good lyric but I see a lack of imagery. That doesn't mean its bad though. I liked the chorus

Good Morning, Mr. Johnson(Johnson),
Go ****, yourself.
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Old 04-10-2008, 03:56 PM   #3
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little too much anger in there really... a rock song needs anger but when you resort to swearing in the chorus when its not a live performance you kinda know you need to get a hold on yourself before you keep writing the lyrics. But still quite good
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Despite what they said *points up* I really liked it...Im not saying there wrong, everybody is Untitled to there opinions, and I respect what they have to say, and no offence is ment, but like I said...Awsome
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Old 04-13-2008, 05:36 AM   #5
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I like it, it's creative and not a complete drag, but you could use a bit more color in your language. IT paints a good picture of the events in my head though, and you really can't ask for more in a lyric.
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