Clumsy Not a Bit - Writers Forum

the_Black_sparrow · 04-03-2008, 04:04 PM

Yesterday I wrote that and now I'm trying to play it on my cousin's guitar...well I'm not so good in playing still but I will learn.

oh, I almost forgot!!! This text is addressed to my old class from the primary school. You can imagine how much I 'LOVE' them

Clumsy not a bit

The gang is from fools

This fact includes you all

But guess what I know the rules

But I won’t make you new so

For dumb clucks this world was not created

But it seem to be with them related

I won’t hang out with dulls even in class

I was not made of glass

But they are part of the fat mass

Try to smash me again

NO EVER!

I had already sever

I’m not depending from all of you

Didn’t you knew

There was a law

Allowing you bow

Out of your crew

Now I decided to abrogate it

So bow and submit

You’re all clumsy and not a bit

None of these fools still want to forgive him

And that’s a part of the universe’s trim

Maybe now you’re sorry

And there’s something to worry

Didn’t you knew

There was a law

Allowing you bow

Out of your crew

Now I decided to abrogate it

So bow and submit

You’re all clumsy and not a bit

I’ll let you know dulls

You in front of me created these mulls

Don’t you dare wish to look me in the eyes

‘Cause every one of you I can factorize

Didn’t you knew

There was a law

Allowing you bow

Out of your crew

Now I decided to abrogate it

So bow and submit

You’re all clumsy and not a bit

billypurkiss · 04-05-2008, 08:25 PM

nice good work!

Crash_Tomas · 04-05-2008, 08:33 PM

it was blunt in spots, and some of what you were saying was out there. With the every other rhymes and all that. Kind of repetitive, like rap. rather than melodies or anything it was just blah blah, blah blah blah.

but, good for you writing and learning guitar. You've got to start somewhere.