Song- Berlin - Writers Forum

Crash_Tomas · 04-03-2008, 02:20 PM

Wrote this in about 20 minutes, so don't kill me if it totally sucks. I haven't written any lyrics in a while...so, yeah. Stuff'd be appreciated.
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(Verse)
A black sky with rays of moonlight,
Drops white snow down on the ground.
Slowly covering it with a thin blanket,
Oh, it reminds me of a day…
That seems so far away…
Yeah, it should be yesterday.

(Chorus)
The trip was long, the days were short.
How I wish, for just a little more.
In that place where everything's all right.
Days have no end, ‘for they don’t exist.
As everything is just…Berlin.

(Verse)
Never in my life, did I see a sky,
As beautiful as on that night.
Even in my desperateness,
I found peace of mind.
It only was for a little while,
But it was worth that smile.

(Chorus)
The trip was long, the days were short.
How I wish, for just a little more.
In that place where everything's all right.
Days have no end, ‘for they don’t exist.
As everything is just…Berlin.

(Verse)
The air has a scent that I can’t explain.
It’s like you’re caught in a dream.
Pinch yourself, I dare you,
You’ll only let out a scream.
It truly is a land of possibility,
Enough so, to prevent insanity.

(Chorus)
The trip was long, the days were short.
How I wish, for just a little more.
In that place where everything's all right.
Days have no end, ‘for they don’t exist.
As everything is just…Berlin.

Everything is just…Berlin.

Crash_Tomas · 04-07-2008, 08:20 AM

lol, yet again. I have awful timing in writing lyrics. Whenever I do, nobody posts theirs. At least, not the usual visitors.

lol, next time I'll be clever.

but, if anyone does come, please comment?

T.W. North · 04-08-2008, 01:07 AM

Well...I'm in a kinda dull mood at the moment and no music seems to be hitting the spot with me, but I'll try and look at this properly...

However, I'm having trouble with the verses. The just don't seem to hit anything within me..too matter of fact, too stunted. Like, you have the right idea on how to make beautiful sounding words and all that, but you need practise is all. Actually, the verses kinda degrade as you go on, as if you had inspiration for the first verse...and maybe the chorus, and then just squeezed the rest out.

(btw, now I've actually posted on yours, could you do me a favour and take a look at Icebreaker? It got nothing as well xD)

Crash_Tomas · 04-08-2008, 08:45 PM

thanks, I suppose. dull moods and all. I wrote this in 20 minutes, as stated. so, everything came naturally. Just the fact that I wrote the first verse later was different, and then, to make it fit better, I put it to the top, cos in my mind, it sounded better.

but, will try and find your set.