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Old 03-25-2008, 12:00 PM   #1
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Unwanted Compliments

Unwanted Compliments

Swallowing my own pride,
Deciding to walk behind,
You, your friends and everyone else,
Is there anything of myself left?

Withheld truths I try to hide,
Memories of the times we lied,
Right now, right here, I feel alone,
Regretting you, and all I own,

I’m just sick of everybody smiling,
Sick of acting like that guy,
Who everybody seems to look for,
Unable to see through my lie,
And of his armour, lies sweet nothings,
And anything included dents,
But the cause of his destruction,
Is of unwanted compliments,

Realising my mistakes,
Though understand just how late,
And before action can be taken,
Another action is mistaken,

Once again it stays with me,
Creating who I am to be,
And I’m too scared to face to face,
With the enemy I choose to embrace and,

The things I do behind the curtains,
The things I say behind my lips,
The choices I refuse to take on,
When I there settled on my fingertips…

I’m just sick of everybody smiling,
Sick of acting like that guy,
Who everybody seems to look for,
Unable to see through my lie,
And of his armour, lies sweet nothings,
And anything included dents,
But the cause of his destruction,
Is of unwanted compliments,
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Old 03-25-2008, 11:53 PM   #2
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I write music for my band, so i know how hard it is to come up with lyrics.
The lyrics were good, Just i don't think they go together very well with any,
Kind of Beat!
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Mm, I can see this working, it's a little syncopated, but there's nothing wrong with that.

Anyway, I can see these going with a solid rock jangle...with a bit of poppy influence. Actually...now that I think about it, I can see most popular bands these days performing this (you know, OneRepublic etc...those bands with ever so slightly whiny voices...)

Not saying your lyrics are bad, I actually like them.
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Do you know what syncopated means? lawl
Has nothing to do with lyrics.
Im a music student so I know that kinda of terminology.

Tom, good job I rather like it
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Yes, I do know what syncopated means, it means on the offbeat. It has everything to do with lyrics, because syncopation is used in singing and guess what is sung? Lyrics!
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Thanks guys, and I understand what you're sayin T.W. They could do with some minor tweaking, or major if need be.

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Old 03-27-2008, 08:42 AM   #7
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Yes, I do know what syncopated means, it means on the offbeat. It has everything to do with lyrics, because syncopation is used in singing and guess what is sung? Lyrics!
Syncopation is a row of alternating on/offbeat rhythms.
Offbeat is just called offbeat.
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Good one! I like it just fine. I can sing it in my head, and it works, so that, along with the wording, is what makes it a good song for me.
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Whoops, but close enough to get my point across.
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