Hold me near <3 - Writers Forum

kaytea111 · 03-16-2008, 10:35 AM

I've never been this blessed this happy before...
Now that its true I don't need to hide from anyone...
When your arms are around me so tight...
I know that your the one, the one for me...

The kisses that we give and get every time we see each other...
I'de do anythig for another, your touch...
I feel safe; out of harms way...
I know that your the one, the one for me...

(Chorus)
Hold me near...Hold me here..
Say you love me, because I love you too...
Hold me near...whisper in my ear...
Man, I don't know what I would do...
If I was ever without you...

I know that I mm your special lady; lets scream it to the world...
No need for words to describe this passion...
This is something to big for this world...
You know that I'm the one; the one for you...

(Chorus)
Hold me near...Hold me here..
Say you love me, because I love you too...
Hold me near...whisper in my ear...
Man, I don't know what I would do...
If I was ever without you...

Kiss me today..
Kiss me everyday...
I really love, love, love you...

(Chorus)
Hold me near...Hold me here..
Say you love me, because I love you too...
Hold me near...whisper in my ear...
Man, I don't know what I would do...
If I was ever without you...

I've never been this blessed this happy before...
Now that its true I don't need to hide from anyone...

Olly Buckle · 03-16-2008, 04:20 PM

255 posts, it's a long time since I last looked at your work, good to see you still here and active.
That little ' mark denotes something missing, so "I'd" for "I would" and "I'm" for "I am"
Can't see anything else wrong here, a pleasant, happy, optimistic song.
All the best, Olly.

Jon1jt · 03-20-2008, 11:39 PM

For pop music, the lyrics work. The only issue (for me) is that I don't see you doing anything different that distinguishes your lyrics from what's all ready out there.

Good effort.