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Old 03-14-2008, 11:25 AM   #1
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Cold Letters


Cold Letters


Verse :
The air I breathe today,
Doesn’t seem the same
It’s getting colder and colder.

Observed your every move,
The taste remained unchanged,
It’s just a second before, I remember...

...the beauty of our sun rise,
With a sprinkle of your perfume
And it still lingers in my room.

...the beauty of the sunset,
With our hands hold on to each other
And it’s still vivid in my head.

CHORUS :

It doesn’t make it any better,
the memories and the letters
that I burn, that I burn.
Hold on, hold on,
the line got cut, my phone went dead.
The temperature is dropping...

Verse :
The fire in this room,
Is not enough to warm the
emptiness, it’s still warmer when you’re around

The coldness of September,
Close my eyes and let it settle,
Let it pass by and drown in my thoughts

The coldness of this winter,
Wrap around the blanket we both shared,
It’s not over...It’s still not over

CHORUS

Bridge :
The temperature is dropping...
My hopes are missing,
It feels like December,
I still remember, I still remember
The smell of sweet summer
The scent of your hair around me,
I still remember...

CHORUS
(2x)

The temperature is dropping, again.

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Old 03-16-2008, 04:33 PM   #2
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"It's still warmer when you're around" seemed inconsistent, I was expecting something in the sense of it being colder without you or if you want the contrast, without the warmth of you around, i think it is the "still" that fractures it for me most.
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Old 03-17-2008, 04:34 AM   #3
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thanks oily buckle..
it's a great advice.really appreciate it...
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