SON OF A GUN - Writers Forum

Chris71 · 02-22-2008, 11:37 AM

SON OF A GUN

I don't want you hangin' round here anymore
Don't want to hear your foot steps on my floor
Get your lyin' cheatin' backside on the outside
Get back under that rock, where you were before

Your lower then a snake in the grass
A snake , of course, has got a lot more class
You didn't have a thing to hide except your wedding ring
That's why I'm givin' you the "coup de grace"

CHORUS
Cause you're a lyin',------cheatin'
Smokin',------drinkin'
Bad hair day and evil thinkin'
Son of a gun!

You said I was the only one in your life
Well, you forgot to mention your wife
And your three kids at home, you said you were all alone
Well, somebody hand me a knife

CHORUS
Cause you're a lyin'------cheatin'
Smokin',------drinkin'
Bad hair day and evil thinkin'
Son of a gun!

Next time I'm out and I get hit upon
Look him up on CHEATIN' HUSBAND. COM
And if I find him there, I'm gonna pull out all his hair
Tell him what I think, then I'm gone

CHORUS
Cause he's a lyin'------cheatin'
Smokin'------drinkin'
Bad hair day and evil thinkin'
Son of a gun!

Chris71

Olly Buckle · 02-22-2008, 06:21 PM

The third line is the best and most original for me and deserves to be used as the hook in the chorus, has a nice country feel to me, but who knows? Maybe you hear it as Indie rock and roll.

Chris71 · 02-22-2008, 07:03 PM

Olly, thank you for feed back. Just about everything I write I would consider to be old country. Back in those days, songs had a story line, and I just keep telling stories.
Chris71

T.W. North · 02-22-2008, 07:52 PM

Hmm, I've been viewing everything you've been writing as a sort of Rolling Stones etc sound, old rock 'n' roll feel.

Chris71 · 02-23-2008, 06:19 PM

You both might be right, I think you hit it on the head, it might be like the old song says

"A little bit country and a little bit rock and roll"

Chris71

CMM_Kaleido · 03-20-2008, 11:49 PM

Agree with Olly about the third line. Made me chuckle. To me, this one says its all country.

Chris71 · 03-21-2008, 11:30 AM

I do like that line also, "bad hair day and evil thinkin', thought most women could relate to that. I also like
CHEATIN' HUSBAND.COM, to bring it up to date. There may even be a site like that.