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02-20-2008, 08:40 AM
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Markings On The Wall
Markings On The Wall
Everyday we search for answers
Question what we did so wrong
All the seconds fade to years
Why have we waited so long?
Did we never pay attention?
Did we overlook the signs?
Now our days are just frustration
And all our words are underlined
All these lies, all this hurt
Is this really what it's worth
All these secrets, all this hate
Is this really worth the pain
Should we try to make it work
Or should we just not try to look
All the things that make us fall
Are all the markings on the wall
Yesterday tomorrow never came
Today tomorrow won't go away
I guess some things just shouldn't change
It's up to us to take the blame
Why did we try to hide it?
Hiding only made it worse
What if we tried to find it?
Could we try to make it work?
All these lies, all this hurt
Is this really what it's worth
All these secrets, all this hate
Is this really worth the pain
Should we try to make it work
Or should we just not try to look
All the things that make us fall
Are all the markings on the wall
All the markings, on the walls
Never lie, they're never false
We should try, we should talk
We could find, we could work
All these lies, all this hurt
Is this really what it's worth
All these secrets, all this hate
Is this really worth the pain
Should we try to make it work
Or should we just not try to look
All the things that make us fall
Are all the markings on the wall
Last edited by AceReject : 03-09-2008 at 11:09 AM.
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02-20-2008, 12:46 PM
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I honestly loved these lyrics,
I though it had meaning, and your rhythm was perfect, the question technique definitly one to be used again.
Can't wait for more,
Tom.
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02-20-2008, 04:04 PM
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Thanks, I actually wasn't expecting anyone to say it was good.  |
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02-21-2008, 12:50 AM
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Actually, this is one of the few forced meaning lyrics that actually pays off in the end. Good flow, nice rhyming, nice meaning. Most people think 'im going to write something with meaning', which while it looks like thats what you did, it wasn't a failed attempt, which is good. Although, people do seem to like using the question technique for this type of meaning, myself included. xD
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02-25-2008, 12:14 AM
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definitely some memorable imagery
"All these things that make us fall
Are all the marking's on the wall"
was definitely the highlight, and justifiably you put it as the title.
although I'd personally change it to
'all the things the that make us fall' instead of 'these'
just a suggestion, and a very small one at that
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02-25-2008, 01:00 AM
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I really loved the lyrics. It made me want to hear it turned into a famous song.
Hoping you write more,
Daniel
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02-27-2008, 05:34 PM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by GivePeaceAChance
definitely some memorable imagery
"All these things that make us fall
Are all the marking's on the wall"
was definitely the highlight, and justifiably you put it as the title.
although I'd personally change it to
'all the things the that make us fall' instead of 'these'
just a suggestion, and a very small one at that
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Oh I like that, it fits a lot better in the song. Thanks. |
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03-03-2008, 06:12 PM
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I really like this song!!! 
It means alot and is very relatable.
keep up the writin, excited to read more |
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03-07-2008, 02:26 PM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by AceReject
Markings On The Wall
All these lies, all this hurt
Is this really what it's worth
All these secrets, all this hate
Is this really worth the pain
Should we try to make it work
Or should we just not try to look
All these things that make us fall
Are all the marking's on the wall
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hey, great lyrics.
can't wait to see more.
just wanted to say that the marking's in the last line
of the above stanza,
should be changed.
markings.
marking's would mean this:
"Are all the marking is on the wall."
thank you.
mIa.
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03-08-2008, 12:16 PM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by HeartShapedBox
hey, great lyrics.
can't wait to see more.
just wanted to say that the marking's in the last line
of the above stanza,
should be changed.
markings.
marking's would mean this:
"Are all the marking is on the wall."
thank you.
mIa.
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Oh ye, I always do that, I never know when to put in 's and when to leave it as just s. Thanks. |
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