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02-18-2008, 05:39 PM
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SWEET TENDER LIES
You tell me you love me, I tell you I love you too But, we both know the truth about who's foolin' who
It's something people say when it's to hard to face reality
So I say I love you and you say I love you back to me
Sweet tender lies Sad tender lies
Keep the truth in disguise
with sweet tender lies
I don't want to hurt you, you don't want to hurt me When we're together makin' love to our fantasies
We never seem to talk much, It's better if not much is said
We never look at our old love, lyin' cold at the foot of the bed
Sweet tender lies Sad tender lies
Keep the truth in disguise
With sweet tender lies
Like actors on a stage, we know our lines and our cues We've got nothin' to save, we got nothin' to lose
It's just a matter of time before this play comes to an end
But, til that day comes, it's back to the game of lets pretend
Sweet tender lies
Sad tender lies
Keep the truth in disguise
With sweet tender lies
Chris71
Last edited by Chris71 : 02-21-2008 at 04:00 PM.
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02-18-2008, 06:58 PM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Chris71
You tell me you love me, I tell you I love you too But, we both know the truth about who's foolin' who
It's something people say when it's to hard to face reality
So I say I love you and you say I love you back to me
Sweet tender lies Sad tender lies
Keep the truth in disguise
with sweet tender lies
I don't want to hurt you, you don't want to hurt me When we're together makin' love to our fantasies
We never seem to talk much, It's better if not much is said
We never look at our old love, lyin' cold at the foot of the bed
Sweet tender lies Sad tender lies
Keep the truth in disguise
With sweet tender lies
Like actors on a stage, we know our lines and our cues We've got nothin' to save, we got nothin' to lose
It's just a matter of time before this play comes to an end
But, til that day comes, it's back to the game of lets pretend
Sweet tender lies
Sad tender lies
Keep the truth in disguise
With sweet tender lies
Chris71 |
I liked it, but it could use a bit more imagery, but besides that its pretty good |
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02-23-2008, 06:37 PM
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i've been reading all your songs and i love them. proper country kind of songs. do you record them?
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02-23-2008, 08:53 PM
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Kiwi, I'm glad you're enjoying the songs, although the melodies seem to come with the words, I'm not musically inclined to play piano or guitar. To answer your question I have made some simple recordings but, for the most part, no I don't record them
Chris71
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03-20-2008, 11:46 PM
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Old love? The old love they had together or loves they had separately? (Still enjoying these, so next . .)
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03-21-2008, 11:41 AM
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Their fantisies of old loves, when making love, is the only thing that keeps them together. The love they had, now dead, lies cold at the foot of the bed.
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03-21-2008, 07:34 PM
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The chorus here is good, and large chunks of the verses can be used, however, there's also large chunks that need throwing. For instance the entire second verse (except the second line which is fab) is terrible. First verse is pretty good though and the third verse is the cream of the crop. Great choice of words.
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03-22-2008, 11:40 PM
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When we're together, making love to our fantasies. That's my favorite line also. Do you have any suggestion for the second verse?
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Donkey/Sherk
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03-23-2008, 03:20 AM
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I'm afraid not, all I know is that it deviates from the other two verse's carefully chosen words and clever analogies to just telling you in plain words. You really need to work on not saying it so bluntly - thats your biggest problem in all your songs (except Castles and Dragons which you doused in metaphor the whole way through).
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03-23-2008, 11:09 PM
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Thanks for your interest in my lyrics, These are the only ones I will be posting. I hope other lyric writers will post and move mine off the front page. If not, I will have them removed. These lyrics were for peoples enjoyment, good or bad, they are what they are. These are only a few of the hundreds I have written, but enough is enough.
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I've got a dragon here, and I'm not afraid to use it.
Donkey/Sherk
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03-24-2008, 01:18 AM
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Dude, this is a critic site. Take the fuckin' crit, don't have a sook and leave.
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03-24-2008, 01:36 AM
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If you can't take it, you're never going to make is as a performer or composer.
BTW, since you seem in the mood for it, the verse is VERY reminiscent of "Lies" by Fleetwood Mac. You can almost here it being sung to the same tune.
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