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Old 02-15-2008, 02:59 AM   #1
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Ghost of a Conscience

Note: This is an acoustic metal song. This may raise eyebrows, I dunno. See what you think.


It's the roads that lead to nowhere
That seem to draw the most
Covered by consensual lies
The conscience becomes a ghost

Evil ascends

When lost in words of advice
The belief becomes a law
Chartered by the martyred books
The passions burning raw

Evil ascends
'Cos God turned their hearts to stone

See the masses come to pray
Scars that build the cost
Salt water is turned to wine
Raise your glasses to the lost

Evil ascends
Evil ascends
'Cos God turned their hearts to stone
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Old 02-15-2008, 07:53 AM   #2
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It's the roads that lead to nowhere
That seem to draw the most - Nice two lines, I feel like I've heard it somewhere else, but I don't know where. So I like it as something fresh.
Covered by consensual lies - Consensual lies, interesting.
The conscience becomes a ghost - As in there is no conscience, or it's hardly there?

Evil ascends - Bah! I'd sure hope not!

When lost in words of advice
The belief becomes a law - Alright, the lines are still nice, but now I feel like I'm being lectured to
Chartered by the martyred books
The passions burning raw - Interesting

Evil ascends
'Cos God turned their hearts to stone - Psh, well, it's your lyric

See the masses come to pray
Scars that build the cost
Salt water is turned to wine
Raise your glasses to the lost - Inferencing that the religious masses are the lost? I see some hints, but I feel the use of raising you glasses conflicts with the other things you propose. Toasts are usually positive.

Evil ascends
Evil ascends
'Cos God turned their hearts to stone


All in all, it's a nice lyric. There's a lot of thought in it, and a careful crafting of well chosen words. I would have liked to see more images, such as you used toward the end, to balance out the heavy lines of meaning, perhaps displaying them. Your style tends to embrace the vague, but I think it could still use a sort of clearing up in the mentioned areas.
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Acoustic metal? I like it!
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Old 02-15-2008, 11:26 PM   #4
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I like it, though it seems a little bit short and halted to me. Like it could have gone on longer and had more of an effect. Still a great piece tho
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ack! been busy, I'm still going to look at it.
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Old 02-19-2008, 11:17 AM   #6
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>< Thanks Thiamor, but one thing I have found confusing is how people dismiss the rest of the lyrics when they come to the chorus. Don't you realise what I'm saying?! I'm attacking zealots and how their strong, literal beliefs (rather than taking the holy words as guidelines as they should be) cause them to do horrific things, and how they belief doing these things means they will go to heaven. *sigh* The moment you mention religion everyone takes you literally. I hate that.
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I don't know about that, I'd say "Raise your glasses to the lost" fits. at least in the genre of metal, its meant with a sarcastic tone, and it would be hard to take it any other way.

And for my taking it too literally parody "but if its burning, how can it be raw?!"
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Old 03-12-2008, 11:20 AM   #9
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One usually needs to take extreme views in order to get their point across, thus, one is often assuming that those extremes are merely talking about the middle.
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