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Old 02-08-2008, 07:40 PM   #1
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Angry ok, thur are ALOT of swear words..

all this shit is pouring down the drain
the once great thing i had is gone forever
but who the hell is the one to blame
i cried so many tears; could fill up an ocean


the rest of me is lying here; gasping for air
in the cold cruel world we call earth
but one thing i know is this shit will go
and in the end, in the end ill never regret myself


(Chorus)
you bitch, you hater, fuck you, see you later
what the hell, give up?, not yet!!!
Running through this part of life,
Fighting through this bull shit I call life!!


Im crippled in my own concept of love and hate,
desperate to be someone I will never be,
Calling out the ones i dont need for me,
pushing away to ones who will stick by me to the end


Taking in chemicals, taking it off my mind,
this fucked up shit ive caused this fucked up shit ive done,
so what will I do now? who will i run too?
yall wanna help me but your making it worse


(Chorus)
you bitch, you hater, fuck you, see you later
what the hell, give up?, not yet!!!
Running through this part of life,
Fighting through this bull shit I call life!!


make it worse, alright, can get better than this
fucking it up, alright, and this is it


(Chorus)
you bitch, you hater, fuck you, see you later
what the hell, give up?, not yet!!!
Running through this part of life,
Fighting through this bull shit I call life!!


the rest of me is lying here; gasping for air
in the cold cruel world we call earth
but one thing i know is this shit will go
and in the end, in the end ill never regret myself

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Old 02-09-2008, 05:43 PM   #2
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DAMN! This song is amazing. You keep this simple anger than you explode with imagery and feeling. This song is a big step up to your other songs (don't take it offensively) Only one thing I think you can fix is:

(Running through this part of life, )
(Fighting through this bull shit I call life!!)
I think you should substitute one of these lines with a different word. Life and life sounds too dull to rhyme

But nonetheless, I like this new type of song your writing .
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Old 02-09-2008, 06:46 PM   #3
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aweee thank you
and fore those two lines, I dont really want it to rhyme, its mainly about "life", thats the title..I just didnt put it up
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Oh I see ok I get it now
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Old 02-13-2008, 03:49 PM   #5
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alrighty
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Old 02-13-2008, 07:32 PM   #6
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i like it, good job.
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