T.W. North

Note: Help me out here, which title is better - Necromancer (Save the World) or Saint of Nothing. Also, again, this is a Melodic Death Metal song, this time with some Metalcore influences.

You live your life like it doesn't matter
Burn your soul like your hearts on fire
Hades is proud, gas your cloud

You are the saint of nothing in particular
You are the witch who cursed our exterior
Can't you see, what we need

Necromancer
Save your world
Hey defiler
Repent now

You treat your world like it isn't living
You expect everyone to do it for you
Through money, you're guilt free

You are the king of pointless pollution
You are the lord who worked us into slavery
Can't you feel, any pain

Necromancer
Save your world
Hey defiler
Repent now

*solo*

Necromancer
Save your world
Hey defiler
Repent now

Mevalgre

I like Saint of Nothing better as a title.

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Damian_Rucci

Damn! Now that's a hardcore song. I like "Necromancer(Save the World) better, I like the imagery, and the anger. Awesome song man

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Mystery

I think you're kind of missing the point of Melodic death metal. It's death metal with more melody, and death metal was originally the "brutal" metal that dealt with grim things. The problem with your lyric as it stands is that a lot of it is awkward for melodic death. Such as:

"You are the saint of nothing in particular"

It's just not something you'd hear in a death metal song, the wording is off, there no dark imagery, in fact, theres no imagery at all from this line. Death metal, and more importantly Melodic death metal is meant to morbid imagery, the problem with what you've written is it doesn't do that. A short time ago a lot of bands decided they'd take things like heavy metal and change the feel a bit, I think it's what you call metalcore or screamo, and we all know how well that turned out >.>

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T.W. North

Erm, Soilwork is Melodeath and it's them that I take ALOT of my influence from, especially from their new album. Plus there's All That Remains influences in this song which is where my metalcore influences come from. Soilwork isn't that morbid at all. Hell, In Flames isn't particularly morbid anymore.

Mystery

You should listen to the early in flames, because that is what defines the melodeath genre.

I'm going to take my favourite soilwork song, nerve, to show you what I mean.

Call it liberation or frustration,
As it hits like a bomb
Tearing you apart as you're first in line,
Entering the zone
Watch how it runs, a nerve wrecking resistance
Watch how it burns, a venomous script's getting formed
You've traveled a long way to get here
And now it's waking you up..

Walk straight for a final solution
Walk straight, don't you be so cold
Walk straight with a clear resolution
I'll state my case and never turn

Watch how it runs, watch how it burns
And it's all a deception
Break it and learn, there's no return
For a presence like mine..
You've traveled a long way to get here...
It's getting all so clear now, all the
Things I know
An elapse of conscious progress will last forevermore
My courageous insanity follows
An infinite time
I'll be attaching the world
On my shoulders
Without a look inside
Inside

Walk straight for a final solution
Walk straight, don't you be so cold
Walk straight with a clear resolution
I'll state my case and never turn

Walk straight for a final solution
Walk straight, don't you be so cold
Walk straight with a clear resolution

Notice the imagery throughout? It's morbid, it's dark, bombs, warfare, burning, hopelessness. It's got elements that I don't pick up from what you've written. Also notice that it's got one big thing about it, it's ballsy, the verse is just, for a lack of better description, manly.

It's not that your lyric is bad, it's that it's just not something I'd think off when I think melodeath.

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T.W. North

Well I admit it doesn't have the ballsy thing to it, but I've personally found throwing in words like 'bomb' etc as kinda cliche and ... I dunno, always seemed rather immature to me. Plus, I think my one thing is, I'm too sensitive to be throwing around ballsy things. I'd end up like one of those try hard screamo bands. But yeah, I meant the sound it'd go to, which I think is closest to the Soilwork song The Pittsbourgh Syndrome