Burying the Past - Writers Forum

nia mora · 02-07-2008, 09:56 AM

I'm three words away from ruining our lives,
And I'm not talking about love
Because thats something we never had
But if I told you I hated you
For everything you said
I'd find myself in a deeper hole
And you looking down with a smirk

chorus:
I wish I could right all our wrongs
But one night in a car isnt worth all the pain
So maybe if I screamed loud enough
You'd know how I felt and maybe
You'll remember that we're supposed to be friends

But I guess you forgot what we had,
What we built, and are willing
To give it all up for your pride.
Is it the truth? Who knows?
Its not like you did much truth telling anyway

chorus

All of our trust got washed down the drain
along with the tears from our eyes
And the blood from our hands
I guess its about time we chiselled our tombstones
because theres no going back to the was it was
or the way its supposed to be

chorus

I guess its about time we chiselled our tombstones
because theres no going back to the was it was
or the way its supposed to be

Damian_Rucci · 02-09-2008, 05:57 PM

Pretty nice, you put it straight out. Normally, I like songs with imagery, but this, this is nice I like it

nia mora · 02-10-2008, 06:16 PM

yeah. i like imagery too. but this is an angry song as well. its tended to be sung in a punk rock vibe. im still working on the music part.

Damian_Rucci · 02-10-2008, 07:42 PM

Cool, cool, what do you play?

nia mora · 02-11-2008, 12:16 PM

guitar(acoustic and electric) and piano.

Flabby O'Flannagan · 02-11-2008, 12:29 PM

As I was reading it I kind of started feeling a folk vibe. The way its straight talking, if you will, or like Damien said you put it out there seems like it'd go good with that monotone, steady vocal style. But I guess it'd work for punk as well, although it lacks some of the emotional material that punk has, imo.

Damian_Rucci · 02-11-2008, 01:06 PM

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Originally Posted by Flabby O'Flannagan

As I was reading it I kind of started feeling a folk vibe. The way its straight talking, if you will, or like Damien said you put it out there seems like it'd go good with that monotone, steady vocal style. But I guess it'd work for punk as well, although it lacks some of the emotional material that punk has, imo.

actually I think it expresses emotion quite well.

nia mora · 02-11-2008, 09:04 PM

yeah... hmmm... maybe a bit of folk. what i kinda meant by "punk" is like the idea of just talking but showing raw emotion. ya know? not like "omgz lyke scream nd cut my wrists" type of deal. i dunno how to explain it lol.

Damian_Rucci · 02-12-2008, 07:40 AM

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Originally Posted by nia mora

yeah... hmmm... maybe a bit of folk. what i kinda meant by "punk" is like the idea of just talking but showing raw emotion. ya know? not like "omgz lyke scream nd cut my wrists" type of deal. i dunno how to explain it lol.

lol i get it. you just wanna have the emotion out there, not like too aggressively just to put it out rawly. Right?

nia mora · 02-12-2008, 10:45 AM

yeah. like telling a story.