Writers Forum - WritingForums.com Home Rules FAQ Members Groups Calendar Gallery Search
» Sign Up «

Welcome to Writing Forums, one of the fastest growing writing communties on the web.

You are currently viewing our boards as a guest which gives you limited access to view most discussions, articles and photo galleries. By joining our free community you will be able to talk with other writers, get feedback on your work to improve your writing skills, discuss ideas, share tips & tricks, network and make friends!

Registration is fast, simple and absolutely free so please, join our community today!

If you have any problems with the registration process or your account login, please contact support.
  Search Forums
Lit.Org - Bootcamp for writers. Post your work and other writers review it, it's that easy.

Advanced Search



Go Back   Writers Forum - WritingForums.com > Creativity > Lyrics
Register FAQ Members List Calendar Search Today's Posts Mark Forums Read

Lyrics Original Song Lyrics.

Reply
 
Thread Tools
Old 02-07-2008, 09:51 AM   #1
Scribe
 
Join Date: Feb 2008
Location: New Jersey
Gender: Female
Posts: 63
nia mora is on a distinguished road
Nothing Left for Us Now

And this is my last request
That you don't bleed your apologies
And scream all of your sorries
Because I think this is it and
I dont want to be trapped
With the guilt that you've left me

chorus:
But looking back at all the mistakes we made
I dont think we can ever be the same again
So now we're stuck to drown in our regret
And pray that we can change for the better

Youve lost your faith in me and
Are ready to walk right out that door
And leave me here with my heart on the floor
With only one person to blame, myself

chorus

Everything is different as our hatred floods this place
And as our wishes our severed from our hearts,
We realize that we're both alone.
We've got our fingers pointed at each other
When they should be pointed at ourselves

chorus

Theres nothing left for us now
nia mora is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 02-16-2008, 03:06 PM   #2
Best Seller
 
Damian_Rucci's Avatar
 
Join Date: Oct 2007
Location: Keyport, Nj
Gender: Male
Posts: 660
Damian_Rucci is on a distinguished road
Send a message via AIM to Damian_Rucci Send a message via MSN to Damian_Rucci
Quote:
Originally Posted by nia mora View Post
And this is my last request
That you don't bleed your apologies
And scream all of your sorries
Because I think this is it and
I don't want to be trapped
With the guilt that you've left me

chorus:
But looking back at all the mistakes we made
I don't think we can ever be the same again
So now we're stuck to drown in our regret
And pray that we can change for the better

(I think the chorus should be a bit stronger and hard hitting)

You've lost your faith in me and
Are ready to walk right out that door
And leave me here with my heart on the floor
With only one person to blame, myself

chorus

Everything is different as our hatred floods this place
And as our wishes our severed from our hearts,
We realize that we're both alone.
We've got our fingers pointed at each other
When they should be pointed at ourselves

chorus

Theres nothing left for us now
i liked it, but I think the chorus needs a little bit of work. I liked the theme of it,maybe to spruce it up a bit you can cut down on the ands
__________________
Check out my blog: D.F. Rucci's Writing
Fourth Lyrical Album coming out July 4th! Check out:
"Cannabis" "Farther and Farther Away"
"Never Beating Heart" "Killing Me"
"Trapped (Lia's Wings)" "Birds"
Damian_Rucci is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 02-17-2008, 12:24 AM   #3
Scribe
 
Join Date: Jan 2008
Location: Washington....or where every I am that day
Gender: Male
Posts: 92
crowe1120 is on a distinguished road
Send a message via MSN to crowe1120
I won't comment on grammatical errors. As far as content I love it the song and wish that I could hear the lyrics with a melody.
__________________
Live.....long...well...loved....and well written!
crowe1120 is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 02-17-2008, 05:58 PM   #4
Scribe
 
Join Date: Feb 2008
Location: New Jersey
Gender: Female
Posts: 63
nia mora is on a distinguished road
Thank you
__________________
Let the monsters see yousmile
-Vega4
nia mora is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 02-27-2008, 07:35 PM   #5
Best Seller
 
Zensati's Avatar
 
Join Date: May 2007
Location: In your imagination
Gender: Male
Posts: 675
Zensati is on a distinguished road
Very good, It seems quite personal, I'm sure most people can relate to this song.
__________________
Arrive.

RAISE HELL!!

Leave.
Zensati is offline   Reply With Quote
Reply


Currently Active Users Viewing This Thread: 1 (0 members and 1 guests)
 
Thread Tools

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

vB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Trackbacks are Off
Pingbacks are Off
Refbacks are Off


All times are GMT -5. The time now is 08:36 AM.
Powered by vBulletin, Copyright ©2000-2007, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.
LinkBacks Enabled by vBSEO 3.1.0


 
You are NOT Logged In.
User Name:

Password



Newsletter

Subscribe to Majestic
the official newsletter of Writing Forums and lit.org
Email:


Related Links

Link to Us:
Writing Forums - Discussions for Writers