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Old 02-05-2008, 12:47 PM   #1
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Not sure about the title. Anyways here she is:

its been so long
since tomorrow came along
and despite all thats happened since
nothings different

can you reshape me?
can you take from me?
those things i don't want to be
like the smoke, blackens the blue sky
over this lifeless sea
will i survive?
will these fires subside in time?

reverse this atrophy
make life the way it was supposed to be
make my aging hopes a reality
before they leave me

so many changes made
the outsides different
but inside i stayed the same
and i reached out to find
that which i held tight
before i realized
that it would all disappear

and now they have come back to me
all those new opportunities
such a way life has of giving back what you had
for you to find, that inspite of that
nothings different
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too much rhymin for me
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Old 02-09-2008, 05:33 PM   #3
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Nice man, a nice simple song that puts it out there. You got your point across with decent description. Only problem I have is the flow. Some of it doesn't flow, having a pattern with the verses, chorus and bridge fixes that. For example:

So many changes made
The outside different

It didn't flow well try to make a song that flows well
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