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Old 01-29-2008, 02:21 PM   #1
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Angelina's Song

something I made for my friend Angelina.

Lying in the corner
watching as the world goes by
she sleeps but doesnt dream
oh yes she says she wants to die

"i wanna lie in his bed
and never leave
I;ll love him till the end
i'll love him till the stars go black
and i'll love him even when I'm dead"

their lips locked with the fireworks
illuminating the darkest nights
she says "he always gave me flowers,
and he always kissed me goodnight
but one thing I never loved
is when he kissed me goodbye"

"i wanna lie in his bed
and never leave
I;ll love him till the end
i'll love him till the stars go black
i'll love him even when I'm dead"

the world has torn us apart
but a thousand miles
can never let me ever let you go

I'll sing this song to let you know

"i wanna lie in your bed
and never leave
I;ll love you till the end
i'll love you till the stars go black
and i'll love you even when I'm dead"
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their lips locked with the fireworks
illuminating the darkest nights
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This is one line I particularly liked, I don't think anything else really spoke to me. It might make a good song, it might not.
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Old 02-07-2008, 02:43 PM   #3
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Thanks for the feedback!
How can I improve on this?
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Old 02-09-2008, 05:51 PM   #4
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I don't think you can improve this. It masters imagery in a nice way and is pretty deep and well rhymed.
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