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01-11-2008, 09:38 PM
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Song- I Sure Don't Mind a Change
This is accompanied by an acoustic guitar. Is quite slow...
(Chorus 1)
I sure don’t mind a change…
I sure don’t mind a change.
I just want to live my life,
And leave something behind,
To be remembered for a little while,
If only for a day….
(Verse)
If death decides to take me.
I will welcome him with open arms.
My only wish, when he comes will be,
That I’d have no regrets.
(Verse)
Life is serious enough by itself,
It doesn’t need help from me.
I’m not one to change for another,
Only for what I feel is right.
(Chorus 1)
I sure don’t mind a change…
I sure don’t mind a change.
I just want to live my life,
And leave something behind,
To be remembered for a little while,
If only for a day….
(Verse)
Keep to the code of life,
Never stray too far behind.
It will not wait for anyone.
I’ve seen it break the strongest men.
(Verse)
In the future I’d like to see,
A world that I’m a part of.
With a wife and some children,
That would succeed me.
(Chorus 2)
I sure don’t mind a change…
I sure don’t mind a change.
I just want to leave something behind,
To be remembered for a little while,
If only for a day…
If only for a day.
(Bridge)
I just want to be remembered…
If only for a little while.
I sure don’t mind a change…
I sure don’t mind a change.
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Last edited by Crash_Tomas : 01-12-2008 at 02:19 PM.
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01-26-2008, 11:26 AM
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Hi.
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I'm Gonna Be A Modern Day Drifter...
"Life is Like a Novel With the End Ripped Out."
-Rascal Flatts, "Stand."
"Broken Promises and Endless Lies, Mindless Guesses and Darkened Skies..." -Thanks Tham~
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02-06-2008, 12:49 PM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Crash_Tomas
This is accompanied by an acoustic guitar. Is quite slow...
(Chorus 1)
I sure don’t mind a change…
I sure don’t mind a change.
I just want to live my life,
And leave something behind,
To be remembered for a little while,
If only for a day….
No images in the chorus! Shame!  But, seriously, it's a good concept, but it could be much better with a few images. I'd keep the last two lines the same though.
(Verse)
If death decides to take me.
I will welcome him with open arms.
My only wish, when he comes will be,
That I’d have no regrets.
Interesting, 3rd line is a bit awkward. I'd see if you could say the last line a little differently.
(Verse)
Life is serious enough by itself,
It doesn’t need help from me.
I’m not one to change for another,
Only for what I feel is right.
First line is definitely awkward, "enough" is a very "stopped" word. The last three lines aren't bad, but again, no images. 
(Chorus 1)
I sure don’t mind a change…
I sure don’t mind a change.
I just want to live my life,
And leave something behind,
To be remembered for a little while,
If only for a day….
(Verse)
Keep to the code of life,
Never stray too far behind.
It will not wait for anyone.
I’ve seen it break the strongest men.
Strongest verse so far, not much nit picking here. Would "won't" flow better than "will not" ?
(Verse)
In the future I’d like to see,
A world that I’m a part of.
With a wife and some children,
That would succeed me.
Images, images, images... ... ... ... images!
(Chorus 2)
I sure don’t mind a change…
I sure don’t mind a change.
I just want to leave something behind,
To be remembered for a little while,
If only for a day…
If only for a day.
Nice slight alteration, fits well.
(Bridge)
I just want to be remembered…
If only for a little while.
I sure don’t mind a change…
I sure don’t mind a change.
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The general concept is nice, and plenty of the lines are solid, I just want to see more...
...you guessed it! Images.  |
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02-06-2008, 08:28 PM
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lol, thanks. This was more of a concept song than an image thing. But I see what you mean.
and yes, I still have the quote. Haven't found anything better yet!
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I'm Gonna Be A Modern Day Drifter...
"Life is Like a Novel With the End Ripped Out."
-Rascal Flatts, "Stand."
"Broken Promises and Endless Lies, Mindless Guesses and Darkened Skies..." -Thanks Tham~
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