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Old 11-17-2007, 03:30 PM   #1
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Never Love You

This is a song I wrote during the summer.

You look at me,
I look at you
You look at me,
But you see right through.

I cry,
You don't see my tears,
I laugh
And you can't see my fears

[BRIDGE]

This feeling is so typical of me,
Trying to be someone I'll never be
I keep trying harder every day,
Because I just wanna hear you say

[CHORUS]
You don't know who I am,
But I know what you're all about
I've got you figured out,
But for some reason you're still a mystery
Yeah,
But she's so beautiful;
Everything she does is wonderful
You don't know how it feels, baby;
To have you to throw it away,
For some girl who will never love you
She'll never love you.


I would count the stars in the sky,
If you would just explain it to me
We could be so perfect,
The two everyone wants to be
You're fooling yourself;
And you don't get it,
It's never enough to just live and love;
You have to live and deal with heartbreak

[BRIDGE]

[CHORUS]

I'd love you forever,
But what can I do?
I don't want to be with anyone but you
And it sickens me to think,
I might be losing this.

CHORUS

Just look at me
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Old 11-17-2007, 08:24 PM   #2
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hrmm... i like it. It's kinda hard to figure out a flow throughout but I'm sure you make it work, there are a lot of rhymes that make it seem like it's held together.

It seems like the first verse is a little different from the rest of the songs because the people seem as though they don't relate well. Did I miss something there? The bridge works nicely, I like it the best. Well done.
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Old 11-17-2007, 11:59 PM   #3
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i like it. theres not much to say (thats a good thing (it means I'm close to speechless)) and i don't give stars very often, but i give u the honor,

8 stars out of 10

congrats!
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Old 11-18-2007, 10:27 AM   #4
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Thanks ! The meaning of the song is me loving someone who is in love with someone who is never going to love them back. So basically a glorified love triangle. It is still rather rough, and I'm trying to come up with chords for it, as I also play guitar.
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