Song - Tears Fell From Eyes - Writers Forum

thamior · 11-02-2007, 07:39 AM

With his eyes upon the falling snow
from inside the cold, noiseless house.
His steps a faded, thudding echo
the same dull rapping incessant sound.

A whistle blew to signal ready tea
for more than one but remaining full.
A tap on the table, a newspaper to read
falling bombs and the screaming sirens in the world.

Chorus:
In the dark of night
after all the bars had closed.
And when the city lost its light
and the stragglers went on home.
Tears fell from eyes
long dried, wrinkled and old.
Tears fell from eyes
that none would ever know.

A quite house smelling just like nothing
with windows closed and space never used.
His own, it was his only something
when there was never old or new.

And he saw a child smile, seated on a swing
the child laughing but was no laugh to hear.
He reached out to touch, to feel and bring
and the child ran away and disappeared.

*chorus*

Bridge:
We blow away like scattered ashes
and then there’s nothing to remain.
All our memories will pass with us,
and no one knew his name…

*chorus*

And as the snow falls, drifting by
his fingers reach out for its caress.
But the window’s crystal-hue softly lies
as on the pane was all his hand could press.

No smile or kiss upon his lips
no waist to secure his arms around.
And now he knew the things he missed
but the sun was on its last way down.

*chorus* x2

Hulls Raven · 11-07-2007, 05:23 AM

Different but somehow poetic in the lyrics.

Davedurdans · 11-07-2007, 03:34 PM

Hmm trying to hard perhaps?

thamior · 11-09-2007, 08:03 AM

Very much so, haven't written one in over a month, so I'm trying to get one out. I'll be doing some more later.

Mystery · 11-09-2007, 08:52 AM

This is actually much better than anything I've read from you since damn near forever.

thamior · 11-09-2007, 08:59 AM

You've said that for the last couple

This particular topic/story I want to approach again, just when I feel some more creativity coming for it.

Gallaxy · 11-09-2007, 06:32 PM

I think the story behind this is beautiful and this is very well written, ill be looking for more of your work.

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thamior · 11-10-2007, 01:30 AM

Just another rewrite to add to the list this weekend. But homework comes first!

I'll try to look at some of your pieces, but I can't promise anything right away. And the rewrite will likely be in a different thread, as I plan on keeping the concept, but changing it up a lot, pretty much entirely.