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Old 11-01-2007, 07:59 PM   #1
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Consumed by Wales (Princess Di)

This is kind of a concept rhyme that i did, i have no 2nd or third verse yet because i wanted some feedback on the idea first

Under the veil a princess consumed by Wales
She hid it well but soon all the public could tell
The final nail came with an incredible pain
In the face of fame she remained calm and maintained
Trained her eye on her enemies, agony disguised
Cries of deceit and lies, they say Camilla despised
Make way for the demise of a people's princess
Was blessed by so little yet so much she addressed
One ear to confess and confide in of her tears
A dangerous life, she described the end of her years
Forward and fast, cried more than anyone could know
Moving towards her last day knowing the shadow follows
All though hollow she swallowed all the resentment
That nearly killed her as she made the commitment
Intent to live the good life instead of battered wife
Rather get away than watch her back for the knife.
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Old 11-07-2007, 05:24 AM   #2
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Short but this has a kind of potential though id advise you to add more to the song to boost it up. Aside from that I found it well written
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Old 11-07-2007, 03:34 PM   #3
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Same sort of thing and I think you'll have the basis for a good one there.
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