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Old 10-24-2007, 06:13 PM   #1
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"God"

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Warning, some lyrics are explicit and deal with terrible situations
Hi everyone this is a new song I have written, it's still very rough. So please help me by giving me constructive criticism, if you do I will return the favor.

"God"

The sad man lies awake
Tumbling to his break
With his crucifix across his back
As his god leaves him in shackles
So many prayers he'd sing
As the blood dripped from his crown
But he is no king
Slowly he comes tumbling to the ground
As he cries "God have some mercy"

*Chorus*
Who's your sacred one?
Who?
Who's the one you call god?
Who?
The heaven's are on fire
Disipating by the hour
True

On a school ground
Massacre would make it a battle ground
The explosions and the guns
Watch them run for fun
So secure, taking life for granted
Voices break the notice
Giving them a choice
Do you believe in god?
Screaming kills the sound
As they come falling to the ground
As the girl cries "father have some mercy!"

Chorus

Suzy lies awake
Slowly dying, she needs a break
In her shit hole home, shes forced to call her own
No family she's been disowned
She cries at the slits across her wrists
A baby on each of her tits
Looking back so enraged
Remembering the day
but her family didn't believe her
She remembered it terribly
Still remembering her screams
As she called "God have some mercy!"

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Old 10-28-2007, 03:57 AM   #2
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That's awesome! I doubt a lotta Christians'll like it though
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Old 10-28-2007, 08:29 PM   #3
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Hey thanks for the comment man,
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