Dylan_Hart

"Darkness of Days"

Shadows consume me
All hours everyday
I live for the satisfaction of the future
But not of the day
Everything that once was has come and gone
Theres nobody home but the lights are still on

For everything I fight for
And all that I bleed for
Is out of control
And I cant hold on much more

*Chorus*
Now im holding back my tears of today
Till im alone in my room and can cry anyway
All was lost and it just took a day
Sometimes i wish to be alone and fight my fears away

*Chorus*

It was all fine and good in the beggining
But what am i fighting for and am I even winning

*Chorus*
Now im holding back my tears of today
Till im alone in my room and can cry anyway
All was lost and it just took a day
Sometimes i wish to be alone and fight my fears away

*Chorus*

Being born is the first part
The second is to survive
The third is feeling free... then die.....

Damian_Rucci

Pretty good. the only problem I have is how the chorus's are spaced out through out the song in a strange way. You also have three bridges, which isn't necessarily a bad thing but not every bridge needs a chorus after it. However, I like it though, hell you've showed it to me before! I like its dark and deep lyrical sense. Keep up the good work, post more on here!

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T.W. North

It's been done again and again and again and again with no major differences every time its done. And you've done it yourself now. It's cliche, it's generic. I personally like this sort of thing, but that doesn't stop it being old.