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Old 10-21-2007, 12:26 PM   #1
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<Severe Lyrical Content>"Reasons for my Hate"

OK the third song I am posting on this wonderful site. It may need some severe edits which I will do after some feedback. Please read it and leave a comment telling me what you think or what needs to be changed


My friends are dead
they've all been fed
By this bitter betrayal
They used to hold me
Now they joke about things to call me
The gun is looking fine
Close my eyes
And blow a hole in my mind

*Chorus*
You all urge me to hate
Myself in many ways
The tears are held in
Until the gland explodes
And you'll find me back where it all began

The road is dead, and as I tread
Your voice fills my head
I cry, and scream for you
How could you do this?
I thought we were in bliss
But the cold rains come, and washes my mask off
Showing the scarred man inside

*Chorus*

I die, deep in though
I always fought, my heart back so long
I see you shining
I try to touch you but your so far away
You know I'm the worst judge of character
I thought you were better
But this hell is a fog

*chorus*(2)

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Old 10-21-2007, 08:49 PM   #2
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wow... really intense! I had a hard time getting through it and focusing. I did immediately notice two small errors though. "BY" should be "By" and "biter" should be "bitter". I'm noticing your style is really hard hitting. I'd be curious to see you write another way to see how it looks. Also, a disclaimer might be a good idea on this.
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Old 10-21-2007, 08:53 PM   #3
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Ah yes thank you, and yes I should put a disclaimer on this for content. I will do the edits, this was not one of my best songs but I like it though so I posted it. Thanks again
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