Song- State of Euphoria (need help) - Writers Forum

Crash_Tomas · 10-05-2007, 10:50 PM

Ok, I fixed it up a little. Tell me what you think...

(Chorus)
How does it feel to be,
In your state of Euphoria?
To feel what you feel,
And to see what you see,
Would be a dream come true.
In your state of Euphoria…

(Verse)
The odds say you’ll never win,
They say you’re a has-been.
As you bask in your excellence,
You prove that they may be right.
Though you’ll never admit,
You yourself can still see it.

(Verse)
If you have to do one thing,
Never trust what you can’t believe.
Try as hard and as calmly as you can,
But don’t strain what can’t be tamed.
Lose your ego and start from scratch,
As you are no longer something divine.

(Chorus)
How does it feel to be,
In your state of Euphoria?
To feel what you feel,
And to see what you see.
Would be a dream come true.
In your state of Euphoria…

(Bridge)
Look into that seeing glass,
And watch as your world falls.
You can’t stop what you want to,
Just let it all out and hope.

(Chorus)
How does it feel to be,
In your state of Euphoria?
To feel what you feel,
And to see what you see.
Would be a dream come true.
In your state of Euphoria…
Your state of Euphoria…

T.W. North · 10-06-2007, 03:26 AM

Well, if you don't feel like writing more to it, you can still make this into a decent song. Flip the chorus into the leading position, follow it up with a verse (or both if you want) then end with the chorus. Due to the way a chorus can be played with, this ending chorus can also act as the bridge and climax. You can still end up with a 3 minute odd song after all that.

Elipsis · 10-06-2007, 10:17 AM

Yeah, TW is right. One of the songs people usually want to hear when i play shows is just a song with 2 verses and a chorus.
Don't try too hard on writing songs, that's what i've learned. If you try too hard, you end up trying to force the song into being good and just end up with a shitty one. Just sit back, relax and let it come to you naturally.

Crash_Tomas · 10-06-2007, 12:35 PM

Thanks, both of you. That helps a lot. But there is more I want to say, but with the limits of the style of lyrics, it's hard to try and have everything flow in the right way.

But, I'll find a way, lol.

Thanks again!

Crash_Tomas · 10-07-2007, 12:29 AM

I fixed it, mind critiquing and tearing it up?

Crash_Tomas · 10-10-2007, 11:20 PM

anybody?

Crash_Tomas · 10-19-2007, 09:19 PM

I think this is my best song yet and nobody has given any input... I sound like I'm begging...maybe I am...

Damian_Rucci · 10-19-2007, 10:24 PM

Ha ha chill I just saw it I will gladly put input into this great piece of work. I liked it, it was very mellow and usually that is slightly difficult to do but you pulled it off. Great work! I would like to see more songs from you

T.W. North · 10-20-2007, 02:01 AM

Dude, sometimes people don't comment. You gotta learn to deal with it. I mean, look down the list and you'll find a song of mine with no comments, but I'm not spamming up my own topic. That often puts people off more than anything.

Anyway, like I said before, it's pretty good and now it's fixed up it's quite nice.

Mystery · 10-21-2007, 07:00 AM

Id drop it and just work on it later or try to do it from scratch. IT seems like your forcing your way through writing it and changing it and loosing track of what it was. It's probably in your mind, but you can't figure out how to properly interpret it to the audience, and your loosing a lot of quality by trying to compromise.