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Old 08-26-2007, 07:31 PM   #1
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The Black Sun Rises

(Verse)
You might think that you are wise
With all your men and all your spies.
But what you have failed to see
Is that darkness falls on me.

(Verse)
Please, look at me with your devious eyes
While I try and make sense of your cries.
Cos I don’t claim to be of nobility
But you persist that you can make me.

(Verse)
If you’ve got any senses left
Watch me make the grandest theft.
I will prove to you that I am more
And that you are just something to adore.

(Chorus)
As the black sun rises again
I see the light.
My eyes are opened
As new angels take flight.
And in this world it’s all the same
While all you can do is just blame.

(Verse)
It makes me wonder what you will do
When this so called battle is through.
All things must come to an end,
And I plan on being able to attend.

(Verse)
A wave crashes against the sand,
But, nothing would match to my demand.
The wind will blow fiercer and rain will fall down
And still, I will be able to live with my given crown.

(Chorus)
As the black sun rises again
I see the light.
My eyes are nearly opened
As winged-devils take flight.
And in this world where nothing is the same
All I can do is try to keep you tame.

(Verse)
The devils and angels will soon collide
Along this great shore and marvelous tide.
Everything will end and all will begin
Our souls and hearts are reinforced within.

(Chorus)
As the black sun rises again
I see the light.
My eyes are finally opened
As our future at hand takes flight.
And in this world where things are the same
All that’s left is to live and be without shame.

As the black sun rises again
I see the light.
As the black sun rises…
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Old 08-27-2007, 12:57 PM   #2
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Input would be very much appreciated...
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Old 08-30-2007, 01:40 PM   #3
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ok..nothing...
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I think the rhyme scheme works throughout, but sometimes it seems like you just fit words in so that you could rhyme them. Also, I'm not sure whether the 1st and 2nd verses having the same rhymes was what you're going for, but it doesn't quite sound right.

It does have the makings of a good poem, however.

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Old 09-04-2007, 07:23 PM   #5
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yeah, that's what I thought after I wrote it, lol~
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