Kewlb

its time for life to begin
don't think just jump right in
you only get one attempt so ya better do it right
just drink it up, spark it up, and let your mind take flight

your life is all preceived in your mind
our world built around the notion of time
its funny how the bad seems slow yet the good so fast
I need to find the time rewind button that doesn't exist
the thought of each passing second making me more pissed

its time for life to begin
don't think just jump right in
you only get one attempt so ya better do it right
just drink it up, spark it up, and let your mind take flight

its friday night and time to chill
what better way to start then a bowl and a pill
the stress and anger of the day fades away
time slows down, its 8 o'clock and I can now start my day
so I close my eyes and with my mind rewind to a time that was hard to find
the clarity allows me to see what reason I have to be
the reason is to strive to provide that which I was denied

its time for life to begin
don't think just jump right in
you only get one attempt so ya better do it right
just drink it up, spark it up, and let your mind take flight

I constantly yearn for life to take a good turn
instead I plunge deeper into debt trying to maintain the lifestyle I set
every second learning and making my moves to acheive what I am deserving
cause you can't sit around waiting for something to happen
you have to be proactive about the matter to get what you're after

its time for life to begin
don't think just jump right in
you only get one attempt so ya better do it right
just drink it up, spark it up, and let your mind take flight

Edgewise

I know I already mentioned this in your "Ramblings" thread, but god, does this remind me of my older writing. Try to come up with some unique rhymes, otherwise it sounds forced. Try not to insert words that interfere with the rhythm of the piece. There is nothing wrong with rhyme or interline rhyme, but imho you don't pull it off well at this stage. An admirable effort though. Keep on choogling.

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Kewlb

Oh, I agree. These are some of my writings from years ago. I do not write things like lyrics or poems anymore and try to focus on writing my novel, a short story when I need a break, and screenplay/scripts for a web TV series I am producing.