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07-11-2007, 09:23 PM
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my rap(linkin park style.)
The kids just sit
not knowin it
they are brainwashed
by the media, uh, wikipedia
yo, they think what they see
is ok to be
but it aint
the image is faint
so we just..
(CHORUS)
sit here
seeing all these kids cry
but we dont
we dont know why
we think
they all wish they could die
and float away to the sky i i
Yo,
we cant look
beyond what they took
its like a hook
waitin to get took
my time is done
this aint fun
trying to tell them all
wake up before they...FALL!
(CHORUS)
this day
is fading away
i cant say
how i feel in anyway
violence, its tearing us apart!
take my body, and rip out my heart!
you dont care
you just sit there
in your chair
waiting for my stare
but you aint getting it from me
its my property
im remembering all the times you fouaght with me
and i dont want you anymore!
anymore!
Oh!
(Chorus)
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07-11-2007, 09:27 PM
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Profound Writer
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(shudder)
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07-11-2007, 10:17 PM
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Prolific Writer
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by the media, uh, wikipedia
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seeing all these kids cry
but we dont
we dont know why
we think
they all wish they could die
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So wikipedia is makeing kids want to die!
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You know what I'm gonna do, I'm gonna go post spam in the lyrics section and post idiotic messages in the fiction section and then I'm going to go into the debate section and I'm gonna post a whole lot of nothing, and after that I'm going to start 20 page arguements about homosexuality. You know why? Because I'm a human being that wants to make stupid noobish posts and theres nothing you can do to stop me.
Have a nice day.
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07-11-2007, 10:27 PM
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man, this thing is kinda a joke, i was just bored!
hahah, yes it is..lol
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07-11-2007, 10:29 PM
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I could already tell it was a joke. What I can't tell is what its about because the first line is about kids wanting to die and the second is about a bad relationship.
But if your aiming for Linkin Park style your certanly getting there.
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You know what I'm gonna do, I'm gonna go post spam in the lyrics section and post idiotic messages in the fiction section and then I'm going to go into the debate section and I'm gonna post a whole lot of nothing, and after that I'm going to start 20 page arguements about homosexuality. You know why? Because I'm a human being that wants to make stupid noobish posts and theres nothing you can do to stop me.
Have a nice day.
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07-12-2007, 02:01 AM
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I hate the excuse "I was just bored" for making crappy art. Writing isn't a way to waste your time. If you're bored, go play a video game. That 's what they're there for.
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07-12-2007, 03:03 AM
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ok, i was just listening to music and i was like "ill make a rap!" lol...
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07-12-2007, 03:04 AM
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oh, i dont know, i just made it up as i went along, it took me like 3 minutes...lol
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07-13-2007, 03:41 PM
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i liked it.
people here are way tooooo..arrogant and critical. they think they know everything and when they find something like "rap" or a "novice" make a post..it suddenly makes em feel important. superior. better.
sooo
they make yu feel like [[shit]] because they suddenly think they're the mayor of literacy;; that they're effin shakespeare when they knooo they started off rough in the start too.
ugh -.-
anywayyssh, i kinda liked it doggy..for yu being bored. lol
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07-13-2007, 06:37 PM
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it suddenly makes em feel important. superior. better.
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As if it were that easy to make yourself feel superior. No one was aiming to hurt doggy_dog555's feelings. He put it up here to get feedback on it, and he did. Why bullshit him and tell him his work is great, so that he keeps on making crappy lyrics instead of having motive to improve? Yes, you're right, we all started off rough, and the reason we got better was by putting in crappy writing and have people criticize it. And if you ask me, I would much rather have people on the internet criticize my rap than god forbid I get on stage and get booed off for this. Doggy_dogg is a nice enough guy and modest enough to improve his writing, so why humor him where he is, instead of encouraging him to improve his writing?
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07-14-2007, 03:40 AM
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thanks sabrina, and i agree with ya jimmymuppet.
i put it up here cuz i was just listeningto linkin park and i just made it up as i went along..i dont think its good myself, i dont think its HORRIBLE, but oh well...
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07-14-2007, 03:42 AM
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Originally Posted by Edgewise
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I agree.
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i put it up here cuz i was just listeningto linkin park and i just made it up as i went along
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Yes... that's generally the path writing drivel takes.
I suppose you made up that post, too.
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07-17-2007, 03:25 AM
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...it's NOT Linkin Park style, but yeah...
I couldn't tell it was a joke, because I've seen plenty of people write this stuff trying to be serious. *sigh* xD But yeah, it was alright, not particularly clever though. If you're going to make a joke song...make it clever. Like Tripod does.
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07-18-2007, 11:32 AM
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I consider myself as a hip-hop conisseur, and, well that was a lazy effort. It's far too short to be considered as a proper rap, and there's no real theme to it. The words you are rhyming are basic, e.g 'see' and 'be'. But if you wanna be like Linkin Park, you still gotta make it a bit worse. Maybe add some rubbish guitar and unnecessarily loud drums.
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07-18-2007, 12:20 PM
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Originally Posted by Sabrina Fleur
i liked it.
people here are way tooooo..arrogant and critical. they think they know everything and when they find something like "rap" or a "novice" make a post..it suddenly makes em feel important. superior. better.
sooo
they make yu feel like [[shit]] because they suddenly think they're the mayor of literacy;; that they're effin shakespeare when they knooo they started off rough in the start too.
ugh -.-
anywayyssh, i kinda liked it doggy..for yu being bored. lol
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