PEACEofaPOET

Avoid her Eyes


Princess, high on the shelf
with nothing left to gain
Princess, up on the shelf
my prescription for pain

avoid her eyes
ones that mesmerize
gorgeous kind
ones that lie

Princess, high on the shelf
head above the shame
Little princess, whimpering for help
tell me, who's to blame

Pretty girl, oh
dirty little bitch
such a crazy, complicated
mixed up, lustful little witch

We're emotionally compatible
sexually interchangable, a
A yearning disease, kind of
natural born killer with fleas

Princess high on the shelf
with nothing left to gain
Princess those who've knelt
tell me, who's to blame

Stealer of the heart
Stealer near or far
Stealer of my pride
little princess, took me for a ride

Always one angel, in the room
nobody knows
That's her over there
a star, among stars
If you can avoid, those
wicked eyes of nowhere

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"In the Afgan hills, the rebels still fightin'
opium fields, keep on providin'
the best heroin, money can buyin'
nobody know, where Osama been hidin'
press conferences keep on lyin'
like we don't know"

Vasque

definitely good as a poem. having trouble gettin a tune in my head. what kind of music? it's pretty tight, no nits for you right now.

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PEACEofaPOET

Vasque, don't know man, just some new words, working the rest out. have the flow in my head, now the hard part, putting it down on the 6 string box. Any ideas? thanks, Peace

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"In the Afgan hills, the rebels still fightin'
opium fields, keep on providin'
the best heroin, money can buyin'
nobody know, where Osama been hidin'
press conferences keep on lyin'
like we don't know"

Vasque

how about something in the realm of 3 doors down "kryptonite"?

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~Vasque~

PEACEofaPOET

yea, that's a possibilty, though i know the beat in my head of that song, it's been awhile since i listened to it, can't remember the tempo changes, etc off the top of my head. i'm gonna have to dig it up and listen to it. thanks for the tip, Peace

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"In the Afgan hills, the rebels still fightin'
opium fields, keep on providin'
the best heroin, money can buyin'
nobody know, where Osama been hidin'
press conferences keep on lyin'
like we don't know"

T.W. North

I like it. Can't be bothered with crit, so I'll just hand out ideas for the music.

This is a dirty song, a dirty song deserves a dirty tune. Gravelly guitar, sinister bass, alot of cymbal work with the drums.

PEACEofaPOET

thanks, T.W. , i like your thoughts on this. do you think i should make the lyrics a little dirtier without losing the concept and the flow of the song?

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"In the Afgan hills, the rebels still fightin'
opium fields, keep on providin'
the best heroin, money can buyin'
nobody know, where Osama been hidin'
press conferences keep on lyin'
like we don't know"

T.W. North

Well, really, the only verse that could need a bit more oomph is the last one. The rest is great. =P

bmroyer

Really good song . only thing is it doesn't really seem to flow as a song.

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PEACEofaPOET

that's where the imagination comes into play, still working through it in my own mind as well. thanks for the look Peace

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"In the Afgan hills, the rebels still fightin'
opium fields, keep on providin'
the best heroin, money can buyin'
nobody know, where Osama been hidin'
press conferences keep on lyin'
like we don't know"