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Old 12-06-2006, 02:16 PM   #1
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Here's another song written by me. Please read and review.

Not long now till the end
No need now to pretend
Cut the ties, loosen the bond
Then maybe I'll respond.

As the light grows darker
As the world grows quieter
As you cease all laughter
Time will end here.

The hands of time frozen
Forgotten in this world
Cut the ties, loosen the bond
Then pray that life responds.

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If my dreams are as dust now,
If the light has faded away
Then I don't understand how
The sun can challange another day.

Chorus

The hands of time frozen,
Forgotten in this world.
Cut the ties, loosen the bonds
Then pray that life responds.
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Old 12-06-2006, 04:37 PM   #2
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It was simple, no real technical errors, flow seemed fine. Not much to offer for comments, it wasn't a striking lyric, but it was a soild piece.
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