earthman buck

I wrote this song a couple summers ago; I'm pretty it's the first song I ever wrote. Tell me what you think.

Death Row Summer

Throw down your prison suits and play
A death row summer's on its way
and as the days begin to slow,
the end of everything you know
you try to sleep it all away,
try to adapt to this new way
try to unlearn your very past
A death row summer's closin' fast

And as you try to fall asleep
You feel like you're about to weep
but all your tears turn into steam
your life is ripping at the seams
And as you wonder what you'll do,
the dark night sky calls out to you
So you gaze blankly at the stars,
looking through your prison bars

And so there's nothing you can do
in this life we're born into
and before your life's begun,
the biggest chapter's almost done
another place you'll never see,
another song you'll never write,
another girl you'll never meet,
Your death row summer starts tonight.

thamior

I might be the only person that doesn't like the central concept of a Deathrow Summer. It is interesting and unique, the lyric holds many fine points of imagery and concepts. But I will wait for another lyric before I let out all my praise

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earthman buck

Haha, fair enough.

In all honesty, I don't think it's a great song myself. It's a bit straightforward for my tastes, but it was written about one of the strongest feelings I've ever had about anything, so it's pretty genuine. It's kinda hard to say your own exact thoughts are terrible.

acapella

I really like the rhythm of this song. I also think that last stanza is genius. Especially the part that goes "and before your life's begun,
the biggest chapter's almost done". This is an excellent way of demonstrating the terror and frustration of the almost-graduating upon the realization that this is the last summer you'll ever have, and it's almost gone.

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WrittenEscape

Pretty much all I can say to that is 'I like, I like'. Really nice flow without compromising the concept of the song.

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