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Old 12-06-2006, 11:12 AM   #1
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Living To Kill

This is a song I wrote back in July for my band. If I can get a recording I could let you listen to it, because as my guitarist says "the music increases this song three-fold". For now let me know what you think of the lyrics.

Take a look out the window
Watch the world going by, going real slow
I just want you to know
No I don't, it doesn't matter anymore
Another day in the life
Will we live or is it our turn to die
Just passing by
Rest stop on the way to the end of the ride

Something doesn't mean everything anymore
Still waiting to drop when I'm four feet under
I'm not living to fill this space of mine
I'm not living to live, I'm just living to kill
Time

Tell me what do you see
Smiling face of mediocrity
Are you what you want to be
Or are you waiting for your life to pick up speed
Get it done, cut the fee
Time is money and money's not free
That's enough about me
Let's talk about it

Something doesn't mean everything anymore
Still waiting to drop when I'm four feet under
I'm not living to fill this space of mine
I'm not living to live, I'm just living to kill
Time

Something doesn't mean everything anymore
Still waiting to drop when I'm four feet under
I'm not living to fill this space of mine
I'm not living to live, I'm just living to kill
Time
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Old 12-06-2006, 12:23 PM   #2
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Can't say I'm super good at critiquing lyrics (they're definitely not my strong point) but I love this one. "I'm not living to live, I'm just living to kill- time" I love that line and it pulls the rest of the song together. And the second verse kicks ass.
So that's me pretending to know what I'm talking about.
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Old 12-06-2006, 01:08 PM   #3
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This was a good piece, new, interesting, with some wonderful lines.
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Old 12-06-2006, 01:27 PM   #4
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Thanks very much
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