Song - The Winds Are Blowing - Writers Forum

thamior · 12-02-2006, 10:25 PM

Change is growing on me slowly
but the years are passing on by.
And I'm so afraid of what I'll be
that I might be left alone and behind.

My sighs are getting heavy
and my breaths becoming long.
There's no way to see destiny
how do I know I haven't got it wrong.

Chorus:
And the winds are blowing,
but they hit me in the face.
Time keeps going,
my body's running
it's my heart that stays.

I used to walk the broken streets
and wonder how I would make it.
I used to only think of me
now I wonder how I will fit.

My reflection shows hurt-filled eyes
but the reflection is not me.
Because though I've been broken by the lies
I know that there's more for me to be.

I still ask who I am inside
though I thought my journey was complete.
I'm still alone within my mind
blind as ever to the truth I seek.

*chorus*

A stranger to the streets I walked
and everything feels so new.
The rain falls and it hasn't stopped
I wonder if I'm just a fool.

I'm looking back and looking forward
and I'm afraid I won't survive.
Sometimes I wonder what I'm looking for
but goosebumps wont tell if I'm wrong or right.

Fear crawls along my skin
and I admit that I am weak.
I can't hold my worries in
and I'm not bold enough to speak.

Sigur Rós · 12-02-2006, 10:52 PM

I know what's making your poetry sound so similar now. It's so simple too. All of them have way to many I's. Maybe you should try one without first person, perhaps. I mean this is good, has nice flow and everything. You just need to touck up on your style. I mean just go through and look at all the I's, I'ms, and I'lls. You will see there's quite a bit. Hopefully I'm not turning you down though. I'm just saying what I see.

thamior · 12-02-2006, 10:54 PM

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Originally Posted by Sigur Rós

I know what's making your poetry sound so similar now. It's so simple too. All of them have way to many I's. Maybe you should try one without first person, perhaps. I mean this is good, has nice flow and everything. You just need to touck up on your style. I mean just go through and look at all the I's, I'ms, and I'lls. You will see there's quite a bit. Hopefully I'm not turning you down though. I'm just saying what I see.

It's true, it is something I need to play around with, as Blademaster said...but no story lines have come to me, and I have difficulty transposing this from anything but first person.

thamior · 12-02-2006, 11:16 PM

Perhaps the truth (and I always admited there was some truth to mystery's flames he was just pompuous about it and mostly incorrect) is not that I'm untalented but that I'm stuck in a bit of a rut. I have on occasion fallen into lapses where I simply don't learn anything new for lyrics and so even if they all mean different things they end up painted similar colors and I dont change up the style. I have done some experiment lyrics which I do feel vary it up a little, but the problem is that those lyrics aren't me. I need to find a way to add little things from those experiments (And other things I havent tried) to come up with some more diversities to my lyrics.

Sigur Rós · 12-02-2006, 11:22 PM

Just practice, or perhaps even take a break from writing to get a grip of yourself and come back to it with a fresh state of mind. Perhaps you just don't go on enough breaks lol. You write more songs than anyone I've known.

thamior · 12-02-2006, 11:26 PM

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Originally Posted by Sigur Rós

Just practice, or perhaps even take a break from writing to get a grip of yourself and come back to it with a fresh state of mind. Perhaps you just don't go on enough breaks lol. You write more songs than anyone I've known.

true, but I get very depressed and empty when I don't write. And my story has garned next to none in critiques so I havent been motivated much to write it (plus it takes more time) I mean I should just focus on school work, but writing lyrics is so much more meaningful.