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12-02-2006, 04:43 PM
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Writing Machine
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Our Stars Shine So Beautifully
Lonely in desolate dreams
the sky seems to fade
behind a red balloon,
drifting in silent dismay
curtains draw back
and the crowd applauds
chanting a name
that I never knew
My tuxedo's fresh from the press
but my hair sings songs of blues
they're drinking crystal wine
and I don't know what to do
destined for greatness
the kind with glory
I sing them another song
I tell them another story
I tell them it's okay
and I tell them it's all right
I sing them another song
and I kiss them goodnight
they applaud and they cheer
for an encore I fear
and the world falls down
so I lay on the ground
to solitary drown
and now
the show is done and
the light's are all but, gone
the cheering has stopped
and the drugs have won
so I cough a spit of blood
and die where it begun
Last edited by Sigur Rós : 12-03-2006 at 07:56 PM.
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12-02-2006, 08:07 PM
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Very nice Sigur, it was even a little inspiring, but I probaly wont write one until Igather more pieces in my head. But anyways, the lyric was great, I caught onto the flow and enjoyed the piece and the images in it.
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12-02-2006, 08:15 PM
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Thanks Thamoir, that means a lot since this is probably one of my favorite 'punk' peices. It's very personal for me and has a lot of my emotion built into it. I can't wait to sing it.
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12-02-2006, 08:17 PM
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Originally Posted by Sigur Rós
Thanks Thamoir, that means a lot since this is probably one of my favorite 'punk' peices. It's very personal for me and has a lot of my emotion built into it. I can't wait to sing it.
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it may be awhile, I got the half-inspiration curse.  |
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12-02-2006, 08:41 PM
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Just fight it with full power and let it blow into a masterpeaice, and hey, the longest you go without inspiration, the better the lyric will be when you get it back.
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12-03-2006, 05:57 AM
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Theres only really one problem with this, until the last verse kicks in, its more fancy words and sentences than emotion.
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12-03-2006, 07:43 AM
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? which words are fancy?
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12-03-2006, 03:56 PM
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Originally Posted by Mystery
Theres only really one problem with this, until the last verse kicks in, its more fancy words and sentences than emotion.
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It's a bit poetic, yes. That's just how I right. I'm trying to put beauty in the pain as well. |
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12-03-2006, 04:22 PM
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Honestly, what words are fancy? they're all words I'd use in everyday language...
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12-03-2006, 04:36 PM
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He probably meant the images rather than words, perhaps, maybe?
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12-03-2006, 04:39 PM
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I guess so, that's the only place where I could pick up anything that would have made sense to the comment. I'm almost done with your challenge, I just have to take this french quiz first.
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12-03-2006, 05:05 PM
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All right, I'll look out for it then.
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12-03-2006, 07:35 PM
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Couple of suggestions
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Originally Posted by Sigur Rós
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and I kiss them goodnight
they applaud and they cheer
for an encore I fear
and the world falls down
and I lay on the ground lie instead of lay, perhaps
and now
the light's are all but, gone
the cheering has stopped
and the drugs had won change of tense
so I cough a spit of blood
and die where it begun began, instead of begun
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12-03-2006, 07:54 PM
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Thanks for the help, I might just revise the first one. The second suggestion; why change tense? Number three; but, it doesn't rhyme!
Nevermind the tense thing, you're right lol.
Last edited by Sigur Rós : 12-03-2006 at 07:57 PM.
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12-04-2006, 07:56 AM
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To some extent, I ment that the poetic influence cut too deep into the AC/DC-ish feel it gets near the end, its like they were written for different things then molded together.
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