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Old 11-25-2006, 07:04 PM   #1
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Song - Inside a Tear

such a cliche name, I know, but its beautiful and I believe it sets a nice juxtaposition for the lyric. Yes, I horribly butchered that spelling.

And so I offer you number 2 in my experiment:

Why do I relive the pain that's been,
harbouring the tortures again.
Fading the rememnants of my mind,
pawing at the prison bars inside.

Chorus:
and they all tell me its the same
look for something different while I'm here.
I remember and it remains
all my world inside a tear.

The images all seem to outlast,
and I can't move on from what has passed.
In dark stone chambers I contemplate,
feeling the blood of my veins pulsate.

An here it is
left to open
left to see.
I miss the kiss
I am broken
I am me.

*Chorus*

These corridors echo memory,
haunted remains of what used to be.
And I am that man in the corner,
head tucked down-beneath my shoulder.

And I am
what was
never be.
Understand
because
I am me.

*Chorus*

Behind these eyes lie the accuser,
the one who lingered long over her.
And though the pain should steer me away,
its for the shame that I still stay.

Chorus 2:
It is my loss to mourn
tragedy unforgiven.
Seeing all the pain I've borne
but it's still mine to live in.

And so I walk these roads of black,
no sympathy to mark my path.
Alone to be until I part,
no need to cry o'er a forlorn heart.

*Chorus 2*

No need to complain
no need to mark my pain.
It is what I've been
it is what I remain.

*Chorus*

*Chorus 2*
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Old 11-25-2006, 07:43 PM   #2
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Very good Thamoir. Lyrical mastery-I loved it.
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Old 11-25-2006, 08:34 PM   #3
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oh you feed my ego too much where is Mystery to tear it apart . Thank you very much Sigur, I am glad that you are pleased with it, I was quite nervous, sometimes I'm pleased with a lyric and no one else is, and I do value the opinion of others.
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Old 11-25-2006, 08:59 PM   #4
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Well, I can't say I have ever read anything bad from you but, you make so much-lol-I'm sure there's a couple. And surely Mystery will be coming out of some alley anytime now.
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Well, I can't say I have ever read anything bad from you but, you make so much-lol-I'm sure there's a couple. And surely Mystery will be coming out of some alley anytime now.
perhaps, but our most recent spat made me run to the mods, so perhaps not.
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Old 11-25-2006, 09:31 PM   #6
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Well, I can't say I have ever read anything bad from you but, you make so much-lol-I'm sure there's a couple. And surely Mystery will be coming out of some alley anytime now.
Try the professional recording studio that his been working at till 4:00 am and you JUST might have something there.

And theres nothing to say that I havent already said.
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hahahaha of course. I would have said that too, but I didn't want to start another battle .
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Old 11-25-2006, 09:52 PM   #8
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Try the professional recording studio that his been working at till 4:00 am and you JUST might have something there.

And theres nothing to say that I havent already said.
What's the point of saying anything at all then?
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What's the point of saying anything at all then?
Actually I thought it was kind of cool, nice to know he's alive and all.
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Old 11-26-2006, 07:44 AM   #10
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What's the point of saying anything at all then?
Whats the point of saying anything about me at all?
Oh yes, there was none.
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ok, ok, I didn't oppose to hearing from you Mystery, but you guys need to drop it now lest another flame start rising. Unless more is added to a useful critique, anything else can be said elsewhere.
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I'm going to bump this, I don't often do it, but this is a lyric I'd like a couple more comments on if anyone is willing.
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Boring.
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elaboration would help, one word trash-comments are only aimed at discouragement.
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