Elipsis

This is a pretty fast-sung song where each line only one chord played with with a very fast and confusing tempo. I couldnt really fit a lyrical chorus into the music that i wrote so its just a short instrumental there.


Lost Boys

We are the lost boys
We swung so happily through trees
And skipped from the leaves
As we lost our families
-oh no

We are the lost boys
We’re taken from our homes
Turned into mindless zombie drones
Forced to answer telephones
-oooh no

*instrumental chorus*

We walk through memories
Of what things used to be
And all those happy things
As we see our families
-again

Can you hear those memories?
Of what things used to be
Of us parading down the street
Catching all the candy
-in our mouths

*instrumental chorus* x2

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thamior

first I'd like to say hi everyone, I was gone from lyrics for a little while because its upsetting not being able to write, but I think I have some new material coming up.

Anyways back on topic, this was an interesting peice elipses. It was diffciult because I cant hear the music and yet the chorus is instrumental, I wasnt all too pleased on the content and a few of the rhymes were a bit too obvious, but itwas not a terrible song. I think with some minor work it could be quite interesting.

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Spooky Cactus

I really like this. I love how normally serious lines about losing families, being taken from homes etc. and happy funny nonsense all goes together.

I know many people wouldn't take this as a compliment, but I mean it as one - I could imagine Wings playing something like this. I'd love to hear it sometime.

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No... I'm a mocker.

Elipsis

ill try to get a recording done sometime this week maybe. Won't be good, i still need to fine-tune some junk

EDIT: oh yeah, this is what the song is about:
remember that feeling you get when you finaly move out into your own place and you feel so free. Then later, you just remember what it used to be like and you just want to be a kid again. Yeah, thats mostly what its about.

Like i said before, the lyrics are sung pretty fast and each line in the verse is assigned to a different chord. The chorus sounds more like a ballad and is slow and seems kind of depressing in a way.

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thamior

sure thing

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Bika

The entire lyric reeks of an effort for the idea, forcing the rhymes out.... coupled with the simplicity of the song and the level of cliche in terms of language, I found the emotional depth lacking. The imagery was inconsistent and obtuse, and failed to convey the full meaning.

Not one of your better efforts, imo.

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Elipsis

yeah i know. Ive lost my touch since i started putting use to my old ones

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