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07-02-2006, 07:04 PM
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Wordsmith
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Song - Alone In Darkness Breathed
The sores on my feet open wide,
the pain rains hell upon my mind.
Holding off what I knew was then,
this time I walk alone again.
Chorus:
But I am truly nothing,
am I really just so lost.
There must be someone, something,
I will not scumb to thought.
Walking in and out from behind,
an echo resonating time.
I'm just a visage to be gone,
the hollow voice of empty song.
*chorus*
In the night the folds are closing in,
wonder who I am and who I've been.
"How does it feel to be on your own?"
I answer I feel so, so alone.
*chorus*
But strding beside me HE lives,
hope, peace and joy are what He gives.
Fruits from Someone thats never near,
and yet there He is standing here.
I'm just a child of the dust,
rage in me as they must.
feel alone in darkness breathed,
and yet He still comforts me.
*repeat last two lines* (or for Vulgur *repeat last bar*)
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07-02-2006, 07:18 PM
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religious much? Loved it. I totaly know what its like to feel like that. Keep up the good work
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07-02-2006, 07:28 PM
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Wordsmith
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Originally Posted by Elipsis
religious much? Loved it. I totaly know what its like to feel like that. Keep up the good work
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looks like im not playing my game quite yet...yea I had to put God into a couple, I am afterall...christian. |
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07-02-2006, 07:29 PM
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hmm wonder when im gunna put Buddha into my songs  .... lol
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07-02-2006, 07:32 PM
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Wordsmith
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Originally Posted by Elipsis
hmm wonder when im gunna put Buddha into my songs .... lol |
thats why you gotta be Christian  , just kidding with ya...ok...now Game!  |
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07-02-2006, 11:54 PM
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scumb = succumb?
Nice 'n' simple. Like it.
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07-03-2006, 11:02 PM
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I don't see how there is any religious hint to this song. I thought that "he" was the second part of you as a person that no other living being but you understands. The wording was delicate at first, and formed into a harder substance when the double-rhyming kicked in to add that flavor. Alone in the darkness breathing? I don't think breathed is the right word.
"Holding off what I knew was then,
this time I walk alone again."
Best I've seen from you so far. July 4th in one minute..
Keep doing you
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07-04-2006, 02:45 AM
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Wordsmith
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thanks for your comments guys. As for the darkness breathed...its ap oetic image....breathing in the corruption and loneliness.
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