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Old 07-02-2006, 01:25 PM   #1
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All the people they run and run until they're out of excuses to tell they're children why thety can't go outside to play. Is it the uprising of casualties in the community?

All the people they run out of places to hide. From the war that is knocking on their windows. Is it over or is there hope for the community.

How could this happen to such loverly ladies and gentlemen? That they should worry constantly about their well being. However there is still hope left for the community.

We awoke at dawn to see the sky was the color of strawberries. We stood amazed at the marching purple mountains majesty. It seems a day has finally come for our little community.



Too hear the song go to http://www.myspace.com/iaae
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Old 07-02-2006, 06:54 PM   #2
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is there anyway you could put this in a more "lyrical" structure, its easier to crit that way.
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All the people they run and run until they're out of,
Excuses to tell they're children why they can't go outside to play.
Is it the uprising of casualties in the community?

All the people they run out of places to hide.
From the war that is knocking on their windows.
Is it over or is there hope for the community?

How could this happen to such loverly ladies and gentlemen?
That they should worry constantly about their well being.
However there is still hope left for the community.

We awoke at dawn to see the sky was the color of strawberries.
We stood amazed at the marching purple mountains majesty.
It seems a day has finally come for our little community.
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Old 07-03-2006, 12:44 PM   #4
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yeah, it still doesnt sound like a song to me. After every line, i lose the beat
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Just listen to the song. Then tell me.
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Old 07-03-2006, 09:25 PM   #6
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I couldnt find it on the myspace....do you have a direct link?
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