Needles To Say - Writers Forum

demon_ · 06-28-2006, 06:04 PM

Needles To Say

[2nd chorus]
Itch of the scab...
Cut from your mouth...
Open from the shouts...
Trench of history
Looking' as it plays its own memory

[chorus]
Needless to say,
The stitches ripped today
Wound open so wide
Thread to cover all the cries away
And let them hide

[verse 1]
Oh, how beautiful, ugly, perfect is this scar?
Who needs a picture, who needs a movie?
When you've got something for free
These are what make my past real.
These are what make my lovely dreams.

[bridge]
Even after the words from out
No matter if I shout
No matter how I put this out
It won't be as tale telling as the needles them self!

[2nd chorus]

[verse 2]
I'm not one to go and hide these under my sleeve
I'm not you to hide your past from your dreams.
I take these, I embrace them,
I'll look at them again and again and again!

Needless to say,
The stitches ripped today
Wound open so wide
Thread to cover all the cries away
And let them hide...
but this would be just lies
(to myself!)

[verse 2]

I'm so addicted! [x4]

ebmadman · 06-28-2006, 07:48 PM

What's up Demon. I liked the aggression this peice had.

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Needless to say,
The stitches ripped today

That's my favorite part. Cool song.

mandax · 06-28-2006, 09:42 PM

I didn't see anything wrong with this. I like the first line of verse two. I don't know why, I just do.

demon_ · 06-28-2006, 09:54 PM

Well, hey, thanks for dropping by and leaving the comments. They're... you... know.. appreciated (I think that's the word)...

Demon

Elipsis · 06-28-2006, 11:21 PM

i really wasnt able to put this to music in my head while i was reading it. It seemed more like a poem and i couldnt figure out what the hell it was supposed to be about. Is the song supposed to be called Needles To Say or Needless To Say? But again, this would make a good poem but i dont know about a song... i guess i'd have to hear it.

EDIT: Oh, it would be nice to know what style of music this is written for. Maybe that would help...a little

demon_ · 06-28-2006, 11:37 PM

It's suppose to be Needles To Say, yes...

And this was written actually five months ago as a poem but I decided to make it into lyrics, then posted them long ag as lyrics. Then I've found them saved on my computer and decided to revise them. I was a very poetic lyric writer back in the day.

There was actually an outro that was something like...

I embrace everyday,
when I got the needles to say:
I was cut up everyway!

but I took it off because that's going to be into the second half of these lyrics.

See me and my band are trying to decide to make a sequel song to either these lyrics or "Liquid Smiles"... so...

Yeah thanks for your opinion. Always appreciated by demon.

Demon

Elipsis · 06-28-2006, 11:46 PM

okay just clearing up my sobering mind right now. So Needles To Say as in what you sew with. I dont understand please explain

demon_ · 06-28-2006, 11:52 PM

Yeah, needles you sew with...

You want me to describe my metaphors right?

Well, when I saw needles to say, it kinda means how every scar you have and every wound you have open you have the needle to tell you how bad the cause of this scar was? How much thread you used... like that, I guess.

It's like (for example) your mother dies... and there's this huge scar left in your life, but it's only your sewer/needle (mender or mended) that actually knows the truth of how large the impact was...

Was that clear?

Me and my metaphors need thinking, but that's just the writer I am.

Demon

Terra Valentine · 06-29-2006, 02:04 PM

Not bad at all, but is that suppose to be Needless, not Needles

Elipsis · 06-29-2006, 03:16 PM

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Originally Posted by demon_

Was that clear?

Not at all, but i've decided to give up on trying to understand

thamior · 06-29-2006, 06:44 PM

it was nice, got better as the song progressed I believe, which is a bit odd, but I liked alot of the images.

demon_ · 06-29-2006, 10:16 PM

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Originally Posted by Elipsis

Not at all, but i've decided to give up on trying to understand

It's sad how a lyricists have trouble understanding metaphors... sad.

It's like "OMG" then cries sad. Seriuosly.

Sick, also.

Demon.

Thanks for the read, Tha.

blademasterzzz · 06-30-2006, 02:27 AM

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It's sad how a lyricists have trouble understanding metaphors... sad.

It's like "OMG" then cries sad. Seriuosly.

Uhm, I think if people can't understand your metaphors, it's time to change them. And you're probably not writing your lyrics for lyricists, either, eh?

Personally, I find it a bit disjointed, like a stream of thought rather than anything continual. My opinion, though.

demon_ · 06-30-2006, 11:29 AM

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Uhm, I think if people can't understand your metaphors, it's time to change them. And you're probably not writing your lyrics for lyricists, either, eh?

Dude, seriuosly, they should quit writing if they can't understand simple metaphors like these (even after I explained it!) And no I'm not writing them for so-called lyricists (if that's what they call themselves; more like emo poets)...

Anyways, I'm glad you brought your two-sense in it, it was constructive...

Demon

Elipsis · 06-30-2006, 11:36 AM

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Originally Posted by demon_

Dude, seriuosly, they should quit writing if they can't understand simple metaphors like these (even after I explained it!) And no I'm not writing them for so-called lyricists (if that's what they call themselves; more like emo poets)...

Anyways, I'm glad you brought your two-sense in it, it was constructive...

Demon

How many of my newer songs have you read? Go back and read Snow Globe in the Sky or My Morning Glory and i will give you $100 for every metephor in those if you understand. Read them and that comment will bounce right back in your face.

EDIT: also you call them simple metephors right after you say they need thinking. Do yourself a favor and think before you write. Dont try to get down on everyone just because nobody here knows you. The more you do, the more people hate you for trying to disguise your 14 year old personality