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Old 06-28-2006, 03:36 PM   #1
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Sinking Boat

for a while now i havent been able to write about anything so i tried my best and this is what i came up with. Im not too satisfied with it so i'll probably play it as an excerpt between songs or something.

Sinking Boat

Loving you
Loving me
Loving all thats around me
Loving love
Loving life
Why wouln't she?

Come to me
I'll take you to the sea
Come with me
I'll show you how to be free
Take my hand
Come sail with me

Believe me
I'll show you sweet things
Honey
Those rings were empty

Loving you
Loving me
Loving all thats around me
Loving love
Loving life
Now wouldn't she?

Come to me
And wipe those tears
Come with me
Forget your fears
Take my hand
Live life with me

Believe me
I'll show you sweet things
Honey
Our boat's sinking

-But not any more
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Old 06-28-2006, 04:21 PM   #2
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I don't think I even want to waste my time...
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Old 06-28-2006, 11:07 PM   #3
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hey thanks dick!
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Old 06-28-2006, 11:44 PM   #4
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Sorry I'm a dick...

but who else is going to have to slap you in the face with 'reality that this was a true lack of emotion, lack of visual, absolutely no originatlity? I'm sorry but this stuff happens. I've done it before... we've all done it. I'm just the one to shit on people.

I'd lie to if I were here saying:

"Oh, this was so good because I relate and stuff. Though it was a bit icky and stuff but I really liked it and stuff. Keep up with the exellent stuff!"

If I said this you wouldn't get no where but write the same...

Don't take it so hard. People improve.

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ps: Please, don't get me to argue about that stuff I've done yesterday. I'm strong on my point.
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Old 06-29-2006, 12:07 AM   #5
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You miss the point Demon. Your original comment was an outright insult.
If you are tired of repeating yourself, post a link to similar comments you've made elsewhere, otherwise post constructive criticism, or say nothing at all.
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Old 06-29-2006, 12:12 AM   #6
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You miss the point Demon. Your original comment was an outright insult.
If you are tired of repeating yourself, post a link to similar comments you've made elsewhere, otherwise post constructive criticism, or say nothing at all.
You're 100% right...

but the second one is nessacary.

Demon sorry.
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Old 06-29-2006, 03:19 PM   #7
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haha its all good. I guess thats what heppens when you try to re-write your worst song you have ever done... I think i have completely lost my writing ability because of lack of personal-life inspirations.
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Old 06-29-2006, 05:31 PM   #8
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You miss the point Demon. Your original comment was an outright insult.
If you are tired of repeating yourself, post a link to similar comments you've made elsewhere, otherwise post constructive criticism, or say nothing at all.
Lol, define constructive
I've made more people improve their writing here than I've made people cry themselves to sleep, but my comment's are still "harmfull and non constructive"

The average human, so indiffirent with a sideorder or applied ignorance, can't see through his own blatant conformism with the rest of the stupid society.
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Edit: NM. Already posted my thoughts on this and they aren't going to change.
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Old 06-29-2006, 06:42 PM   #10
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haha its all good. I guess thats what heppens when you try to re-write your worst song you have ever done... I think i have completely lost my writing ability because of lack of personal-life inspirations.
give it some time, I'm in a rut too, you just need to see yourself through it, dont give up.
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Old 06-29-2006, 06:56 PM   #11
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give it some time, I'm in a rut too, you just need to see yourself through it, dont give up.
yeah, im not. Im just spending my time writing music for the 27 songs that i dont have any for
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Lol, define constructive
I've made more people improve their writing here than I've made people cry themselves to sleep, but my comment's are still "harmfull and non constructive"

The average human, so indiffirent with a sideorder or applied ignorance, can't see through his own blatant conformism with the rest of the stupid society.
You guys don't know how true this...

You guys are lucky it's just me...

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