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06-27-2006, 01:44 PM
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Member
Join Date: Jun 2006
Posts: 10
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Father Speaks Though Feelings
FATHER SPEAKS THOUGH FEELINGS
Verse:
Listen carefully to
Dad's word.
He speaks through
your soul.
Hear his voice
in the music.
Chorus:
Let him calm
you through the
wind.
Let him comfort
you with a
gentle touch.
Let him speak
to you.
Verse:
When a friend
hugs you feel
God's love flow.
Someone calls you
when you're lonely.
You will know
the Lord's presence.
You miss a
friend who passed
away.
A song on
the radio plays
a song that
reminds of them.
That's Father way
looking after you.
Chorus:
Let him calm
you through the
wind.
Let him comfort
you with a gentle
touch.
Let him speak
to you.
Verse:
When you feel
like your life
is a mess.
Just look at
a baby.
You'll see Father's
face.
When lift get
chaos and hectic
watch children play.
When you begin
to sorry just
look up to
the Lord.
Chorus:
Let him calm
you through the
wind.
Let him comfort
you with a gentle
touch.
Let him speak
to you.
Verse:
When life gets
too busy for
you.
Be still and
watch the river
stream flow.
If you feel
sorrow fill your
heart.
Talk to our
brother.
If you feel
dark take over
remember the sun
is the light
from the Lord.
Chorus:
Let him calm
you through the
wind.
Let him comfort
you with a
gentle touch.
Let him speak
to you.
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06-27-2006, 02:50 PM
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Prolific Writer
Join Date: Feb 2006
Posts: 367
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What's up Lani. This felt like folk music, some of which I like, so it felt okay to me. The wording felt a little awkward though. It didn't seem emotional enough, just m.o. It's a good song, nevertheless.
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06-27-2006, 06:12 PM
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Member
Join Date: Jun 2006
Posts: 10
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hey
Not too much Just writing alot of songs and thinking. It hard to write in the heat it humid where i live. I am reading a few books, whatup with you
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06-27-2006, 07:35 PM
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Prolific Writer
Join Date: Feb 2006
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Same thing. Right now, I'm finishing up a script for the first movie I want to produce. I'm a film student, so we get to rent out the equipment. I've got my cast down, and I'm waiting for clearance on a few other locations, but hopefully, I'll be ready to start filming 2-3 months from now.
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"I beg to dream and differ from the hollow lies...."
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06-27-2006, 07:37 PM
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Wordsmith
Join Date: Jun 2004
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yea, the emotion lacked a bit for me, but it picked up a little in the second verse and went away again. Idont know, its good, I'm kinda a stickler for consistent structure (same number of syllables, lines in verse) but sometimes other things work, it was decent.  |
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06-27-2006, 08:01 PM
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Ink Slinger
Join Date: Apr 2006
Gender: Male
Posts: 2,358
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I liked it. It's genuine, heartfelt, and a pointed message.
Some of the wording needs a little work, and the phrasing is a touch awkward, but... good stuff
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Every artist is a cannibal; Every poet is a thief All kill the inspiration; and sing about the grief - U2
Say what you mean, and mean what you say.
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