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(Verse 1)
Watch the reels come crashing through
The panes of glass built all around you
Strip apart their images one bye one
Until the fragments are all that surround you
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Kinda of icky in the flow (but that's probably just me). However, the visuals on this were awesome.
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Then stare into their broken surfaces
And I dare you not to wonder to yourself
If all the lies you told your head were true
Weren't just a little girl crying out for help
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Icky flow, but awesome visual, again.
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(Chorus)
As much as I said I loved you
As many times as we spoke those words
Repetition never made a damn thing true
Thats a lesson you're gonna have to learn
Our time in that world will be a blur...
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This was really good. Flow'n'all. Don't change this a bit.
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(Verse 2)
Go tear it in half, burn it to the ground
But don't try to singe me with the blame
You can't rip a mans heart from his chest
And toss it around like loves a game
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Good stuff, but I really don't think you put much though into the 'blame and 'game' stanza... seemed a bit too 'unthought'.
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You said the glass scattered about
Was a reflection of the way we felt
But we didn't feel, we just played pretend
We faked our way right into living hell
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This was a good ending verse into the bridge. The visual was so great and true to the lyrics, also.
Nice bridge... flowed well.
Ending chorus... cliche, but okay.
The outro kept it true.
Man, you did it again. Impressed me, but the flow was icky in some parts. Tweaking 'can' be done, but it's not totally recommended since most of the stanzas make it stay true to the story. Some rhymes were cliche, also (but it happens)
Demon
