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Old 06-20-2006, 01:11 PM   #1
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The Last Time

Once again we've broken down
And this time I won't be able
To fix us all on my own
I can't believe I believed
The promises you never made
Why can't you just leave me alone

And I swear this is the last time that I’ll be fair
The last time that I will be there

Chorus:
The last time; never again
Isn't that what I said
The last time I let you win
But I know even before
You open the door
I'll be there, I'll be there
For the last time again

Miles away I hear you call
Your promises of suicide
Instinctively I pick up the phone
Repeat my words of comfort
Wondering, “Am I insane?”
Catch a cab, now I’m flying home

And I swear this is the last time that I’ll be fair
The last time that I will be there

Repeat Chorus

Now here I stand with flowers
But their scent can’t mask the sting
Of the guilt of the last time
I can’t believe I didn’t believe
Your promises, your wishes all came true
And this really is the last time

The last time that I’ll be fair
The last time that I’ll be there
The last time, the last time
The last time . . . !

The last time; never again
Isn’t that what I said
The last time you let me in
But you knew even before
You opened that door
I’d be there, I’d be there . . .


Repeat Chorus
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Old 06-20-2006, 04:04 PM   #2
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Old 06-20-2006, 06:36 PM   #3
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Use of language could be improved.
This
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Now here I stand with flowers
But their scent can’t mask the sting

I liked.

Perhaps:

Quote:
Miles away I hear you call
Your with
Quote:
promises of suicide
Instinctively I pick up the phone
Repeat my words of comfort
Wondering, “Am I insane?”
Catch a cab, now I’m flying home


It started well but degenerated into a forced/easy rhyme.
Likewise for the first verse, and, for me, the repetition of "the last time" wore a bit thin by the end.
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Old 07-10-2006, 12:26 PM   #4
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Yeah, yeah, it's cliche. I know. But it's just a rough draft. Thanks for your input
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